Reviews for A Dark Tempest
writingbella chapter 1 . 7/13/2008
A little confusing but good
Undead Serenade chapter 1 . 5/27/2007
This is much better. Perhaps the length allowed you to give more details, or the subject just works better to your writing advantage. Maybe your other work wasn't so great and this was a good day. But whatever the reason this piece is more visual to my eye. It flows and it has pretty imagery. And the short usage of italics brings a little more to the piece. Overall, I really just like this piece. The wind/trees have great personification and you don't sound too formal or anything like that.
Goon1117 chapter 1 . 2/26/2007
Oh wow. Great job. Alot of suspense. I love it. It sounds like a part of a story through...it'd be cool to see more things like this. How exciting! Good job!
Aisling Grey chapter 1 . 2/25/2007
I like this - very much. Nice use of foreshadowing and holding the interest of your reader. I hope you plan to continue this. I'd love to read more.