Reviews for Smooth Move
hairspray cliche chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
Haha. I totally feel connected with the main charrie because we are almost the exact same... Except that I barely pass as 5' 2"
thefrogsareattacking chapter 23 . 7/21/2009
Poor girl, tripping over. But Aww! Good story!
NeitherNora chapter 23 . 7/8/2009
Huzzah, fun story! Well, all of your stories that I've read so far have been fun, but I'm notoriously (or, more to the point, not-so-notoriously) lazy about reviewing, so I fear I haven't told you that nearly enough.

Anyway, the character of Rae was very easy to identify with - finding guilty pleasure in romance novels and random usage of unusual vocabulary are traits I share. Solid writing throughout, with more than decent grammar (loved the who/whom debate, as this is a highly neglected issue that people should be more aware of).

Also, I think that Rae would fit in quite well in New York City. Her complaint about people not getting the humor of sarcasm would not be a problem here. New Yorkers have sarcasm down to an art form.

... And this is why I'm lazy about reviewing. When I start, I have trouble stopping. Fear me and my long-winded opinion-ness!

In conclusion: Good job all around.
Inescapable Nymph chapter 23 . 7/6/2009
OMG I LOVE THIS STORY!
StartsWithALine chapter 1 . 7/6/2009
I love her character! She is like me in so many different ways. Though I don't think I would have just laid on the ground after I tripped, haha.
thatswhatsheesaid chapter 23 . 7/3/2009
so i was randomly going through the cliched romance communities and i came across this one. and i tarted reading it and i totally loved it! i think it was because the character wasn't this tragic love struck teen. she didnt need a guy. and she didnt really want one. she was perfectly okay. but then she became friends with wes and she became closer and closer. and when she did realized she liked him she didnt like start being all lovey and gushy and that wasnt all she ever though about and just gr... i cant explain it. gah i tht! anyways, i liked her character and the story because it was your most common cliche at least. i luved when she was at the dentists office. XD favorite part not between her and wes. i liked it because it didn't rush into things and it had detail it wasn't like, "wes talked to a pretty girl. the girl glared at me..." like a lot of them on FP. so yes it was probably one of the better stories i've read on here in a while. so you should continue writing. whenever you get the time obviously. XD anyways i'll go now considering this was one long ass review. :D(this is probably the longest review i've ever written...or at least one of the longest.)

-Liv
LocalYokel chapter 10 . 7/2/2009
Ok so I've read this story so far and well, I really liked the first chapter. It was funny, the characters' personalities were well portrayed and nothing was too over the top like with some stories I've seen. HOWEVER, I really don't want to be mean or anything but rae's personality is really starting to grate on me. It's the constant bickering with anyone and everyone and there's just no real depth to her character, which is probably something that should have been developed a bit more by this point seeing as it's the tenth chapter. She's annoyed by pretty much everyone around her and she just seems really cold and self centred person, which really puts me off as a reader.

I really can't read a story where the protagonist's personality really doesn't have any chemistry with anyone or anything apart from the books she reads.

I'm really sorry for the negative review there but I just had to say it :S

On the positive side I really do think you have a knack for being descriptive and your vocabulary is brilliantly mature, something that I really appreciate in a writer.

Hope you don't hate me after this :S
So.Who.Will.Call.Me.Beautiful chapter 22 . 7/2/2009
I loved the ending. I practically squealed when she finally confessed that she loved him...it was so cute!
Devilish Kisses chapter 1 . 6/20/2009
Lol, you're main character sounds alot like me! I read books by the bucketload because I have no life and Sarah Dessen truly is amazing! As soon as i read that line about her book, i just had to review. So now, i'm going to read the rest of the chapter! P.s. have you read SD's new book along for the ride? I have yet to read it
VampireSandwich chapter 23 . 6/17/2009
I loved your story, I read it all in one sitting. I love happy, cliche endings. Thank you for some feel-good reading. You're a good writer.

:)
Shut Up and Smile chapter 10 . 6/9/2009
HELO there!

my name is sammy (you may have guessed by my name)

i just read ur story (im on chapter 10.. yes i know im sloww - but oh dear lord i have soo many assignments and crap due i needed a break andd your lovely story has done the impossible and made me laugh after doing soo much darn school work - oh how i do hate school) and back to your story - it was freaking hilarious i don't think i've laughed that hard in ages!

BAH HAH who runs into a bookshelf and pretends they're kind of, not really knocked out - i was cacking myself. I totally love IZZA she is awsome and of course Rachel and Wes are col too and should be TOGETHER cos they are just way too cute - anyways i would love to write more but i gotta go to netball training soo ill shall catchya later

much love
Bluecoco100 chapter 3 . 5/27/2009
lmao, the ending was hilarious. totally took the cake man. The whole line about the myspace url thing. I loved it!
thesewords chapter 1 . 5/21/2009
Yep. His eye color changes. You should definitely fix that!
thesewords chapter 4 . 5/21/2009
Okay so I haven't gone back to the first chapter to check yet, but didn't Wes originally have hazel eyes? And now they're dark brown? I don't know, I'll go look.
little-red-bag chapter 8 . 5/19/2009
While I appreciate the rarity of authors on fp who uses esoteric words, I found your story a true headache to read and it's not because of the vocabulary. I found the main character to be flighty and long winded. Her thoughts are very annoying and jumbled. I seriously tried to stick with this but I must stop reading it now. Your story about Patrick Fitzpatrick was better.
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