Reviews for A Light in the Darkness
whacked chapter 1 . 6/30/2008
Lord... I haven't reviewed anything in 300 years!

But I really liked this piece, very uplifting. nice job!
Knightmage chapter 1 . 5/23/2007
OMG, u WROTE this right?

last time i tried a sonnet,it sucked bad.

but then, u can be a poem queen.

not a prom queen, a poem queen.

i dont live in america just in case u wanted to know

Knightmage
Atheneon chapter 1 . 3/17/2007
M...I like the theme. You sound very much like someone getting ready to leave home. It is an interesting time: fear, excitement, sadness, nostalgia...That was me last year. A very good sonnet. Good luck!
CHIIJOY chapter 1 . 3/16/2007
I have super respect for anyone who tackles some Shakespeare and this was excellent.

And to the sky we cannot always reach.

At times, our hopes and dreams, no matter how strong,

Like an unwanted storm, dismal thoughts breach.

my fave part. :D
radioactive stanica chapter 1 . 3/13/2007
I really love it. I think you did a beautiful job even though you said it isn't perfect, but who is perfect anyway. Also ...

Best Wishes!

TSP
Adaku chapter 1 . 3/11/2007
God, you should be a haiku/poem writer. And maybe someday I can illustrate your work. _ Thanks for the review, its been a long time. Can't wait for summer soon. Till Next Time

Adakuchan
aeolyn chapter 1 . 3/6/2007
Quite true, your poem. I like it a lot, especially your opening two lines and the ending couplet. Nice.
Tatiana Moore chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
Okay... this is going on my favorites! My favorite lines were:

"At times, our hopes and dreams, no matter how strong,

Like an unwanted storm, dismal thoughts breach."

"And yet, our friends will always be around,

Giving us hope whenever we are down."

I don't know much about poetry so I can't really comment on the structure and stuff like that, I just know that stuff is good when it connects with me. This really connected with me! Great work. Did you get an A? I hope so!
Caffeinated Cupcake chapter 1 . 3/1/2007
i loved the ending; how you expressed dismal feelings throughout the poem and then ended with a ray of hope

you captured some universal emotions in your sonnet

for a first try, it was very nice (i think). im not really an expert, as i have written only 2 Shakesperean sonnets (both of which are on my fictionpress). if you want, you can read them (one is in his style (my first) and the other is not). enjoy, if you wish

liz