Reviews for La Vie En Rose
Box.Of.Chocolates chapter 4 . 3/10/2007
me thinks me like the story...its relli good...
Lady Wrye chapter 4 . 3/10/2007
Wow, I love your story. Sabrina is so funny!

pinkshades chapter 4 . 3/10/2007
Aw... I LOVE CHIP! He's so cutely, adorably, Brandonish-ly AWESOME. I love how your story reads... it has such rich, British-humour overtones... I almost feel like I'm reading another Jill Mansell book, or another Bridget Jones Diary, but with a twist. My only criticism is punctuation.

[“Honestly?” He said after laughing.]

That should read: ["Honestly?" he said, after laughing.]

[“Chip, stop apologizing! Its fine, I promise.” I said laughing.]

That should read: ["Chip, stop apologizing! It's fine, I promise," I said, laughing.]

You're missing commas here and there, (making a lot of your sentences run-on) but it doesn't take away from the story. I'm just really anal when it comes to punctuation (I think I over-punctuate sometimes), which is why I notice.

Ohh and also... I remember this tip from Ms. Hassard... she says that when you write numbers, to write them phonetically instead of numerically so: "eleven" instead of "11".

Otherwise, your story's sweet. Me loves. Keep it up and Max sounds way too cool... my hope is that he really pisses Sabrina off, to the point of no redemption and then BOOM! Blows her out of the water with his thoughtfulness... Is that too cliche? Maybe, maybe. It's just that I can picture Sabrina's reactions and I have a feeling they're gonna be HILARIOUS. Whatevs, this is already too rambly. Keep it up, hon!
jammi chapter 4 . 3/10/2007
'Channel, Nicky made me put it on.'


and see she's just digging a deeper hole for herself. She needs to tell him. Chip, where she works, and soon.

haha, Max is interesting. sorry, if this review makes no sense, I'm tired.
semiturtle chapter 4 . 3/10/2007
I love how the story is progressing. The story line is really engaging. Keep up the good work!
wildnfreedolphin chapter 4 . 3/10/2007
Yay! A different plot from the usual romance stories. Can't wait to find out what happens. ) Updates soon, ya?
eatmysocks chapter 4 . 3/10/2007
eatmysocks chapter 1 . 3/10/2007
I'm lovin' the Chip/Sabrina pairing ... :D
jammi chapter 3 . 3/7/2007

I wonder if Chip heard the 'you need to get laid' comment. And am I the only one who thinks that the fact that her MOTHER and her best friend talk about her sex life? Hahaha,

"You’ll never really climax if you’re tense and-“

ahaha, that's definitely a moment to pass the phone on. I would've pretended that my battery was dieing.
Sweet Roisin Dubh chapter 3 . 3/7/2007
Loving this story! Sabrina is just so adorable. I can't wait to see how Chip reacts when he figures out that Sabrina works at his law firm.
pinkshades chapter 3 . 3/6/2007
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Oh, this chapter is amazing in more ways than one. But I especially loved this part: "she actually passed up man meat for cow meat".. hmm, that sounds familiar.. kind of like the text I sent you last night! I absolutely loved the cookie/non fat latte bit, plus Cherry. God, I love Cherry. But my one beef (haha, beef, get it? Cuz your chapter had something about a cow... okay, don't mind me, it's late).. my one beef is that her best friend's name is Jonas. JONAS. There's a JONAS in my story! Everytime I read JONAS, I think of MY Jonas. Can't your boy be called Jonah? Jonah's just as hot. Hell, he survived a whale's stomach for goodness sakes. If that's not survival skills, I don't know what is.

... pause ...

But if he has to be Jonas, then... fine.

LOL update soon.
ALY55A chapter 3 . 3/6/2007
Hey! I really like your story. It's very entertaining and I already love the Chip/Sabrina pairing. I can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon!
Skeptic-Critic chapter 2 . 3/5/2007
Ok so initially I was going to be one of those really annoying readers who reads the story and never comments...And I made it all the way through the first chapter...Not many problems I just kept the comments in my head...No biggie...And I made it through most of the second chapter too...Until we came to the names...It was the killing blow for me...

Like your main character here...well okay so we have the same name...Anyway...That would've been okay...I've read stories with my name in it before and didn't review...Not the hard part...The hard part came when you knew the movie...You knew the Audrey Hepburn movie...No mention of 'Sabrina the Teenage Witch'(which, unsurprisingly gets really old, really fast) just a mention of a classic by Audrey Hepburn...Not only that, you also knew another of her movies...And your character defended her because she was one of the most prominent actresses at her time and was a figurehead for Hollywood class and sophistication...Now that I've managed to sound like a freak, a spaz, and a documentary about Audrey Hepburn...I'm kinda at a loss for words...

So yes...The only reason I chose to review for this story was because you are the first person I've ever met (not literally obviously) who knew about another Sabrina...

Since I have decided I'm going to start reviewing for this story I may as well keep going...After a rant like that, I don't think I could creep you out anymore...This is terribly funny...Like you know how a lot of authors put humor as one of the subcategories and sometimes it's either not funny or it's only funny sporadically? Only stories like this one should be able to claim humour as a subcategory...Your's is one of the first truly and thoroughly funny stories I've read on fp...And I've been reading for close to four years now...

Um...Right so...OMG...Spaz that I am I just totally got excited all over again...When I was reading the summary and everything for this story I thought it was terribly funny that the main characters name is Sabrina and the title is La Vie en Rose...which happens to be in the movie...And I thought it was completly coincedental...And fitting of a romance...And I've just realized you probably did it on purpose...Which just makes me that much happier... I'm actually going to stop talking...If you're lucky...So shoot me a response...I guess...Especially if I creeped you out so badly you're thinking of leaving fp and not finishing this story...If you do, I promise I'll never review every again...Just so long as you finish this story...

So...Now I'm really going to stop...As you may have noticed I have a rather bad tendency of rambling...And starting myself off again...Like now...So ciao...

Hehehehehe...It rhymes...
jammi chapter 2 . 3/5/2007
hahaha, I like Sabrina. Even if she is currently under the influence of being away from home she's great. And Chip sounds like he needs someone to smash his ego to bits even if just temporary. It'll be interesting to see what happens when he finds out that she works for him.
pinkshades chapter 2 . 3/4/2007
Hey hon! How awesome is it that I saw your story just out of the blue? I'm so glad you posted it up! I gotta say that porn-induced-food-fantasy dream in CH1 never fails to make me laugh. _ Just something I noticed though: her name is still Sienna (twice actually) in Ch. 2. Might wanna edit that... oh and I think your posted the same information twice in Ch.2? Anyways, can't wait for your update.
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