Reviews for Bus Boy
eiyuang999 chapter 1 . 5/25/2010
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XxNikki-FacexX chapter 33 . 4/15/2010
I am loving this story!

I really hope you update soon.

I would love to read it.

And in all honesty, it was a bit slow a first.

Like it was kind of to short and such.

But you did really good on it.

If that sounded at all mean, it wasn't suppost to.

But, i love the story and i cant wait to read more! (:
hipgurl chapter 33 . 9/3/2009
yay! ur back for another chapter! omg they kissed! actually cameron kissed pen but still!

i am so excited!

i cant wait till the next chapter!
Brenda Agaro chapter 33 . 8/30/2009
I like the ending. The plot is going great and good word choice and character interaction.
Radioactive Jeans chapter 33 . 8/28/2009
*confetti and more confetti*

YES! PEN, 1 MILLION POINTS FOR YOU! That's great! This is going so well. Now I'm hoping Samantha doesn't ruin it further. I hate that girl D:

But awesome update! I totally loved it :D
Uniquely Proud chapter 32 . 6/23/2009
I like your style of writing. Update soon.
Brenda Agaro chapter 32 . 6/20/2009
I like the part with Gem and Pen. I can understand how it feels to be nervous. Can't wait to read what happens next (take your time.)
Brenda Agaro chapter 31 . 5/19/2009
I started reading this the other day and I just finished the latest chapter and I got to say that this is really good so far. Scratch that, it's brilliant! :D

First off, I love the main character Pen. Her perspective is clever and not shallow. I love her quirks and way of thinking, her friend Gem, her interaction with her parents, brother, Samantha and Cameron, and I love how you made her experiences and her attitude/response realistic.

Even though the chapters were short, I figure that it's intentional and they were well written and I could tell you gave effort in writing them.

There were a few spelling errors/typos. I apologize for not pointing them out to you (I wasn't always on my computer when reading this). But overall, this is creative and an enjoyable read (clever characterization and a well thought out plot - I seriously can't stop reading whenever I get the chance) and I hope you'll post the next chapter when you're able to.
Radioactive Jeans chapter 31 . 5/17/2009

*happy dance*

After 31 chapters, man! WOHO!

Now let's wait for Pen's intelligent reaction. *observes*
hipgurl chapter 30 . 5/12/2009
when is the progession going to start it is taking to long! everytime i read another chapter i have to read the chapter before again...
Radioactive Jeans chapter 30 . 5/11/2009

I'm going to die and it'll be your fault. ALL YOUR FAULT!


Cam, damnit, stop beating around the freaking bush! D:

Anyway. HAHAH. Awesome job on this one! Keep it up!
Weirderest chapter 29 . 4/30/2009
Ooh I absolutely LOVE this! Pen's hilarious. I love your writing style, its really unique and funny at the right parts. Gem's cool, i love her name. Update soon please :) great job on the character development and the honest relationships!
Goldenstars chapter 29 . 4/29/2009
no story stopage !

i wanted to read more, more i tell you !



anyway hmm good story line, you write at the most randomest times on her day and you're good enough at that, that I didn't even realise to now that theres been nothing her family or anything to not do with Cam, Gem, Samantha and a few randoms.

I like how short and to the point your chapters are and how random everyone is.

keeps writing !
Radioactive Jeans chapter 29 . 4/27/2009
'‘Yeah, let’s go!” Gem said enthusiastically, taking up my limp carrot in her arms and dragging me out the door.'

HAHAH that last line totally made my day! Aw, and thanks for the shout out. I feel so special now. :D
hipgurl chapter 29 . 4/27/2009
well that was indeed very short at least its and update long over due!

i didnt expect her to have a fully bondaged arm from a "little" fall

when will ur next update be!

i cant wait to see cam's input in this situation.
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