Reviews for Start
CareKisses chapter 1 . 3/28/2007
I think its very well done! good job! keep writing.
antigonelives chapter 1 . 3/8/2007
I would say that the grammatical divisions hindered the flow, but that would be hypocrisy because I format my poetry precisely the way you do.

I thought 'good bye' was one word? Maybe 'tis a usage thing in other areas of the world? No idea. Anyway, good job with this.
Tytherpol chapter 1 . 3/8/2007
It's really easy to break apart sentences and delete enough of the words to try and make them seem deep- and a lot of people do it. They often use big, 'powerful' words in them, though. It's a little different that you didn't do that, but it's still a lot the same as most others. Sorry for sounding like such a hater. I'm not hating on your piece, in itself, it's actually pretty peaceful and pretty, but the style. I'm just a stupid kid anyways and it's smart though, so good job. I like it. ~Sara.