Reviews for Where The Falls Begin
Nirnaeth Arnoediad chapter 1 . 4/3/2007
I really enjoyed reading this; I think my favorite part was the series of little flashbacks about Caleb's childhood. My biggest suggestion isn't really writing related, but I think it would make the story a lot easier to read if you double spaced between paragraphs, and then used a different means to show scene breaks.

It's kind of difficult to keep your eyes on the line you're reading when everything's bunched together. In terms of the story, I mostly noticed minor things that slip by a spell-checker; another read through would probably fix that in the future. However, there was one point during the eulogy where Caleb breaks from the past tense to the present in the middle of a tirade, which was a little jarring to the flow of the dialogue. When he gets going, though, he really picks up a rhythm; great job. Overall, a great read.