|Reviews for Writing Prompt: Firsts|
| Twist Their Emotions chapter 1 . 11/30/2009
Very interesting! I like the unique characters! It was different than anything I ever read before!
| JennieMR chapter 1 . 9/4/2007
Very good! I especially liked the very end. :D Love casts out fear, eh?
| RuathaWehrling chapter 1 . 3/14/2007
Greetings! I'm looking for essays to read now and stumbled across yours, so I'll take a look. I'll comment as I read:
1.) "Judging by his bloodshot eyes, the night before had been a long one." - The ending of this is awkward (read it with the sentence before it to see why). You might be better off saying something like "those nights were long ones" instead.
2.) "Somebody up there was playing a cruel joke when they made her into a psychiatrist." - Haha! Indeed!
3.) "My knowledge of geography, sadly, would be up-to-date only if I lived in 1990." - I have this problem as well...
4.) "Something tells me that God probably has a thing for tropical fish" - This line made me smile!
Aw! What a cute (and unexpected!) ending!
I really enjoyed this piece. I think you did a great job with the narration - it really sounded realistic and will give people a lot of insight into the mind of someone with OCD. Also, the commentary was really quite amusing! Well done!
I should probably mention that, because of the style of writing, this should be under a different category. It's really not an essay. (A simple reason for this is that essays don't use dialogue, which this piece does.) So I'd suggest you move it - but don't take it down entirely, because this was awesome to read!
Very well done. This one goes on my favorites list!
| Daniel Clarke chapter 1 . 3/11/2007
This was excellent. Really, really excellent.
Only it should probably be in the General section, not the Essay section.
Are you going to post anymore stories or essays?