Reviews for Where Did I Go?
Nemonus chapter 1 . 3/14/2007
Interesting.

positive: The celler feels both pastoral and fantastical, a nice combination. I like the lines "Spiderweb kingdoms reign here,/and the peasants,the flies/-do not seek an audience with the nobles," and "from sun to cellar.".

negative: The second line, "down to the celler,"needs a capital letter. It is, though, then a fragment, and might serve the poem better with a question mark after "...earth." "...of dingy glass jars and lordly spiders" needs a period. Remember in the last stanza that you only need to capitalize words at the beginninng of sentences, not the beginning of each line. In that stanza you do neither consistently.

Good.