Reviews for Veiling Reality
herpius derpius7 chapter 1 . 3/14/2007
This was spectacular.

"You gave me wings in stories / that didn't fly."

"You tore down castles and walls / that were paper."

I especially love those two lines; they just sort of speak to me, and strike my heart.

Nice job.
radioactive stanica chapter 1 . 3/14/2007
Good work! I really like your poem. I am going to add this to my C2!

Best Wishes!

Nemonus chapter 1 . 3/14/2007
Very interesting. I am unsure of your exact stand, or whether the address├ęd "you" is fictional or not, but emotion is there and "faded" is a powerful word with what exists here behind it. The only line I'd fix is as follows; I don't see that "with a deep breath" adds to the theme. Pretty good poem.