Whoah. This is...fantastic. And haunting. And vivid and flowing and raw all at once.

The line, "the sun did explode/into neat daisy rows"... I have no words.

Ugh, my writing sucks now. I wish I could write poetry like this.

That is beautiful!

My favorite

and i swear when she hit the bottom,

"the sun did explode

into neat daisy rows," it's soo beautifully written. What a nice image.

I got goosebumps reading this. My favorite line would have to be "the sun did explode into neat daisy rows". Simply amazing.

"and it felt like the BC's, the ABC's,

when letters meant everything;

when jesus wasnt around."

I can't even explain how much i love this concept.

You are phenomenal.

I always pride myself in my writing, then i read things like this and its like

"Cassie your shit."

haha, very well done.

you're just genius. i'm so jealous. my writing sucks right now.

whoa. so mindblowing. those last lines...

favourites.

this is just brilliant. I saw that someone else said this, but it's true; this really reminds me of alice and wonderland. brilliant images. I fell in love with nearly every single word.

Somehow I thought that I'd reviewed all your recent works, and wow was I mistaken. The sound in this OVERWHELMES me. "the sun did explode-into neat daisy rows", is the most unique off rhyme that I've read in awhile. I like how this is specific, and evocatory, if that is a word, at the same time. It brings the picture into focus, but lets the reader expand out from that vision. The repetition of "she" really keeps this grounded in the individual, and the individuals place in the scene. I haven't been able to read or write much lately, but this cheered me up. Thanks, this was marvelous. Hope all is well with you. MD:77.

All I can really say is wow. I dont really have words to explain the feeling I get from this poem, but i really LOVE it. I like how you say that the sun explodes when she hits bottom.

Yet another marverlous work.

this poem seems very childlike with all the images yet it's rather grotesque, too (in a good way...the images are very strong). it makes me think of alice in wonderland, but not the disney version, it's definitely more like lewis carroll's rather bizarre tale of another world.

Ah love the imagery with the little insertions about life such as "when jesus wasn't around" - truly gives insight into your thoughts.

sometimes I just don't get your poetry.. it seems like all pretty pictures, but nothing beneath. but, pretty images still. i enjoyed it, even if i can't make any sense out of it.

marie

Wow, great imagery! I can't even describe what I though about this other than highly impressed.

~Cristina

like a person pushed off the edge, driven insane by life. the imagery was impressive. excellent.

keep writing