|Reviews for A Little Bit Crazy|
| sonder this chapter 18 . 12/21/2015
I had really liked the beginning premise for this; a bookish girl who one day meets some random customer that gave off misleading signals of being a stalker. And the more chapters I flipped through, the more I became interested in seeing how this kind of relationship would develop when it turns out they used to be childhood friends who are now estranged. But as the story came along, I couldn't help but notice how judgmental you made Carrie out to be; I'm not sure if it's specifically your thoughts that unintentionally came through her voice or that truly was her character but for instance, the way you described Laurel and her friends through Carrie's eyes - how girls who are caked-face and dressed in scandalous clothing are instantly categorized as dull, desperate sluts. If you were intentionally making an immature character then alright, I can see why you inserted that comment but if immaturity was not your intent then it just gives the reader this impression of Carrie being hypocritical. A girl who is afraid of being judged, yet does it so casually to others. How can she judge a person by the 'cover of their book' when she has never even met them before? Labeling and superficially grouping people is an easy mistake made by novice writers so be careful of that - because (ideally) we should know by now that every human being is much more complex than the image s/he projects to the social world. Of course, my latter comments do not matter in the context of writers who want to make a judgmental character, only to develop their character over the course of the story but for this story, I did not get that vibe for Carrie's character which is why I am leaving this critique here.
There were other instances too, such as the one where she called herself boring simply because she loves to read. By making that comment, I feel she never really accepted that part of herself. And offhandedly implied in the same space that people whose only activity was reading were dull creatures. And while yes, it was quite obvious that she had low self-esteem, by the end of the story, I felt like she still equates any activity that is not reading to be the better, fun side to life. Perhaps you did not intend that kind of message but how Carrie's POV was written, it came off that way.
Lastly, the last couple of chapters of Carrie making that... 'make-Seth-squirm' plan - her reasoning for it had sounded plausible at first (of standing up to people and finally putting her foot down) - but the execution seemed like unnecessary additional drama. Her other reason of doing this to prove to Seth's friends that she can, in fact, get a boy just further reinforced the image of her immaturity. Yes, I know she is a teenager and as part of growing up, we have our moments of 'I cannot believe I did that.' But it seems like Carrie feels that her person can only be validated through other people's acceptance of her, which is not a healthy way to live, and I can understand that kind of thinking if it had happened near the beginning or the middle of the story but since this occurred near the end, it feels like Carrie's character has barely grown.
It has been years now since you last wrote this so there's a possibility that your characterization in writing has improved by leaps and bounds but since I will never know unless you come back to this site with another piece of work, I'll hope that in the mean time you won't take my constructive criticism as offense.
| gyoung chapter 18 . 5/3/2015
Loved this ending. I enjoyed your writing very much. It's easy to follow through the story and you go straight to the point. Thanks for writing :D
| gyoung chapter 1 . 5/1/2015
The first few lines convinced me; I want to read this story :)
| It's 2016 chapter 18 . 1/21/2015
Thanks for sharing this funny, unique and 'a little bit crazy' story! :D
| cryin bc of this chapter 18 . 9/13/2014
this was so cute oMF i died
| twiinklex chapter 18 . 4/17/2014
Very cute, refreshing and unique story! I was expecting more drama / conflict / heartbreak / tears - things you would find in about 90% of the romance stories on FP - because I'm a sucker for those type of things, so the simplicity of this light-hearted story surprised me. Yet it manages to be engaging at the same time with likeable characters. Well done on your realistic and well-developed female protagonist, who's someone with flaws yet doesn't come across as whiny or annoying (and she's able to admit to them too) and someone people can relate to. She's very original and not loud-mouthed / sassy like many of the female leads on FP stories.
Love the pizza job as a subplot.. very interesting indeed. A wonderful read especially since I was in the mood for something fluffy and light hearted but engaging. Definitely checking out your oneshots! :)
| Cookie Seller On The Dark Side chapter 18 . 2/17/2014
Oh wow, that was amazing!
| Jess chapter 3 . 12/6/2013
I like your chapter titles, they're pretty creative :-)
| Jess chapter 2 . 12/6/2013
Oh wow, u had me in splits at the last dialogue...guy and their typical minds :D
| Jess chapter 1 . 12/6/2013
Wow, I've only read the first chapter and Im already hooked! Ur an awesum writer :-)
| mightya chapter 18 . 11/8/2013
Great story! :)
| yommy gomge chapter 8 . 8/15/2013
| awaitingthedawn chapter 4 . 8/14/2013
oh my god I couldn't stop laughing for the whole thing! I love you!
| Minkaos chapter 18 . 4/16/2013
This was such a fun and cute story! Carrie and Seth are adorable together and I'm really glad things worked out between them :D
| lalaith chapter 10 . 2/16/2013
Frigid, salty LAKE water? Seriously? Everyone knows that lake water is always fresh!