Reviews for Apples
riotmaker chapter 1 . 3/22/2007
this is beautiful. the beginning is especially vividly gorgeous.
cursorblock chapter 1 . 3/22/2007
Nice visuals in this. It brings a whole other level of meaning to forbidden fruit.

I was a little confused by the pretty n pink line. I was under the impression that she was the fruit and he was pulling her off the branch. I was expecting it to be his hand. Maybe I'm just confused.

Anyway, I enjoyed it. Thanks for posting.
All Alone With Her Thoughts chapter 1 . 3/20/2007
I like this. There should be a ' in the line "Her pretty n pink nail polish" before the "n". Just a little thing. xD

Rowan.
SirScott chapter 1 . 3/20/2007
This was different. It sounds like the girl of this poem met up with a vampire.

SirScott
partingissuchsweetsorrow chapter 1 . 3/20/2007
OOh, I like. I like the comparison you came up with. Very original. Keep it up.
fallawayphoenix chapter 1 . 3/20/2007
It's pretty good. For some reason it almost seemed to get lost in itself near the middle. Even though it's a contradiction, I like the line "Of tainted perfection" a lot. Overall I like the slightly abstract metaphor.