Reviews for window streaks
Guest chapter 1 . 5/7/2013
people leave the lights on throwing rubbish everywhere rubbish in sea rubbish everywhere rubbish in the sea rubbish everywhere sooooo recycle ruse reduce repairrrrr 2 times
Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 1/5/2011
Captain Bligh—control freak

Clicking steps—planks of teak

Wooden walls—briny leak

Crashing wave—trough to peak

Oil—sprang forth—& Steel

Dynamite—burst loud

Engines—fires consumed

Signals—ether swam

Railroad—Telegraph—Steamship

iron—Conduits—copper

village—Linking With—city

Megalopolis ate all

Now—enclosed

Flitting—here & there

Every one's inside one ship

With Bligh's precision motivator
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 5/17/2007
This has an excellent sound and spin. I like how the movement carries the sound as well as the imagery. This could be an everywhere poem, or a right here poem, which is a difficult thing to achieve. Good write. MD:77.
Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 3/22/2007
This isn't bad. You've done well to create a piece that doesn't need punctuation and uses verbs well. It's just a tad dull, it works but there's no vivid pull that makes me really interested and I think that lies in your word choice. It's almost too simple.

Otherwise, good idea executed well.

.:midnight:.