Reviews for Syracho Sword
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SchitzoPanda chapter 1 . 9/13/2012
It is an interesting inovvation, but this reads more a like a summary than an actual story, add details.
Toxin89 chapter 12 . 9/24/2007
You alreay know that there are a lot of things that need looking over, so I won't talk about that. You're doing the crossover already! Well, I guess I better get to work even though it won't show up in mine for a while. Oh well, I wanna say congrats but you honestly know this chapter dosen't deserve much praise. Keep rollin'.
fanficfreak35 chapter 1 . 9/20/2007
i appauld you for taking the time and courage to write this story and put it out here to public view. In return i'm going to give you constructive critiscm. You sotry lacks detail and looks like a 6th graded wrote it. Maybe your area sixth grader who knows. (Ok so that was a little harsh but i'm going to explain) *You wrote this: "This angered the King of Fudomine and he declared war upon the Penti. Penti did not back down and sent troops to attack the Penti." * First of all how can the penti attack the penti/ A second of all, well it's just not correct or atleast writing material to say, they were angered so they attacked. or Penti did not back down. zyou say King Fudomine angered and saddened by the loss of his daughter struck out with hios army at the Penti. Something along those lines you understand. Now a good author goes back and doubles check what they've written or they get themselves a beta, try one of those. Good luck
Sir Scott chapter 12 . 9/17/2007
Good to see update. This chapter didn't answer the questions that you opened up from the last, but it's good to see that you have updated. You like ending your chapters with a cliffhanger. Which is cool, it keeps the readers in suspense.

~SirScott
Sir Scott chapter 11 . 8/14/2007
You left the reader in suspense with the fight over Kyshiro, which that helps keep the reader interested in this format. Having Kyshiro making a pact with this old new found friend seems too much like the deal he made with the other character a few chapters back. Some of characters think and act too much like that is your weakness. A story with this many characters could be stretched into a whole series of books.

Your strengths are that you can write good descriptions and you make the reader really feel like they are part of the action. So good job on that. Take care and continue writing.

~SirScott
Sir Scott chapter 10 . 8/14/2007
The fight scenes are pretty descent. Although, I'm surprised that Kyshiro is having so much trouble with fighting a minor character, but that does follow the new school of super heroes. I guess I just prefer the old school where once the hero shows up the villian pretty much gets whipped.

~SirScott
Sir Scott chapter 9 . 8/13/2007
The theif is a strange new addition to the story. You write at a nice quick pace.

~SirScott
Sir Scott chapter 8 . 8/13/2007
There's a lot to take in this chapter.

It seems that Kyshiro has a lot of mental issues.

~SirScott
Sir Scott chapter 7 . 8/13/2007
Kyshiro probably should have just killed his enemy without so much needless talk. Other then that the descriptions were good.

~SirScott
Sir Scott chapter 6 . 8/13/2007
The reversing of time was a neat effect. I like how you ended this chapter on cliffhanger.

~SirScott
Sir Scott chapter 5 . 8/13/2007
I liked how you did the flashback in this chapter.

I'll give you a longer review when I make it to chapter 12.

~SirScott
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