Reviews for Dark Dreams Haunting Me
TaltushMeiMei chapter 1 . 3/27/2007
The thing is, this poem is REALLY inconsistent. The first three lines felt like you wanted this to be an elegant, flowing poem, but then you throw a bunch of all caps around with the word "sucks", which absolutely destroyed the previous image. Then you sort of returned to the overly flowy and elegant theme, except by then it felt too fake. The overusage of "tried" also got annoying. Finally, "me and my friends" kind of bothered me. I know I sound like an English teacher, but "my friends and I" is much better. Overall, I think the poem could work if the whole "SUCKS" thing was taken out. It kills the mood and makes the poem feel very fake and annoying. I actually like the writing style, but those two lines kind of ruin it.