Reviews for The Inscription |
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BregoBeauty chapter 31 . 1/27/2008 Sorry it took me so long to read this! I hate play week (I was the assistant producer). Wow, so John's mom knew Meg's mom? Neat twist! Another excellent chapter! I'd say more if I wasn't so exhausted. :-D Keep up the amazing work! |
monsterpetals chapter 1 . 1/26/2008 sweet. definately reading more soon ! |
KiraLove chapter 30 . 11/28/2007 Beaut-ti-ful. You know, like Hades says it on Hercules. Not that I mean it that way. Oh well. Good chapter. Keep up the good work! -Kira Love |
BregoBeauty chapter 30 . 11/26/2007 Excellent chapter! I'm at a loss for words. Yay for John and Meg! That's all I think of. Absolutely perfect for them! It fit the mood and everything! Keep up the incredibly amazing work! Please, please update soon! :) |
BregoBeauty chapter 29 . 11/26/2007 In response to your reply, I don't think Meg's revelation was too quick. I think it was perfect. She seemed to struggle with it a bit over the past few chapters and it really fit here. Now, for the new chapters! You'll have to forgive me for being slow-NaNoWriMo stole my soul and I have really fallen behind on my reading/reviewing. Once again, I am so impressed by your usage of imagery! It's absolutely fantastic! I love Jonathan's reaction! The pausing, the kind of like "Wait... what?" almost thoughts in his head, makes it appear as he almost didn't dare believe his luck and it just really fit his character. Not to mention how entertaining it was! I also love the interactions between him and Gregor where he's trying to not to behave like a teenager and be a reserved adult and not punch Gregor's lights out (Which Gregor seriously deserves!). Aww... so cute/sweet! The whole Meg and John part at the end. I really feel like I know these characters now. They feel like good friends and I really hope their relationship succeeds. Off to the next chapter now! :-D This one was fantastic! |
BregoBeauty chapter 28 . 11/13/2007 Wow, this was such an intricate chapter that I don't know where to begin. Her braclet and Ekanta's necklace being essentially the same was a nice touch. Yay for Meg, or should I say Mac, admitting her feelings to John. Her emotions are so real and heart-felt that it's hard not to share her pain in this chapter as she struggles with her feelings. This was one of the best chapters I've seen from you! I swear, with each chapter you get better and better at writing! :-D Keep up the excellent work and please udpate soon! :) |
BregoBeauty chapter 27 . 11/4/2007 Excellent chapter! I can't even think of words to describe it! Anyways, I do hope that John and Meg's relationship works out because I feel like they both really do care about each other. Of course, my mind is thinking that means John has to turn on his father and the company, which means he'll need help from Nate and anyone else he can get on his side and also probably helping Zeke. I think John could do it and if he lost Meg, if he actually did change his ways, he might be able to keep her. I'm rambling... Anywho, please, please update soon! The suspense is so great it's KILLING ME! :-D |
BregoBeauty chapter 26 . 10/26/2007 Excellent chapter! I'm continually very impressed with this story. The descriptions are so vivid that it's reather easy for me to picture everything. I know I say that a lot, but it's a very tricky thing to do and you do an amazing job with it. That was a neat little twist with her being able to read the card. I guess it was written in the old language of Meg's lineage. I'm so glad she knows about Zeke now. Yay. Please, please update soon! :) |
Laeden chapter 24 . 10/10/2007 My first review was prematurely sent. However, what I wanted to say, is there's no comma before "and." A comma followed by a conjuction only separates two sentences. Since Janguars isn't a sentence but rather the last part of a list, there's no comma. You have a few instences of present tense. ", growing solemn as he pushes a stray hair out of my face." Normally past tense is better. Switching from past to present usually isn't a good thing to do. You also have a lot of passive verbs. Try and say more with unique verbs that convay a lot of emotion. Also, another thing I noticed. You describe a few things about a certain area or situation and kind of drop it. Stick with it and really describe what things look like, taste like, feel like, hear like, etc. Use the senses to describe surroundings. I hope things helps a little, ~Laeden |
Laeden chapter 25 . 10/10/2007 Overall your writing was rather intriguing. I did notice a few things that kind of nerved me a little. First, just to point something out, you have a few grammatical mistakes. "perfectly manicured lines of BMWs, Mercedes Benz, and Jaguars |
BregoBeauty chapter 25 . 10/9/2007 Just dropping by to say I just read the last two chapters and they were amazing! Still grounded, so I don't have time to say much more than that. I can't wait to read more! Please update soon! Oh, and I love how John switches into angry mode occassionally! It really works well. :) |
KiraLove chapter 24 . 10/7/2007 Wow. That sums it up. Really, that's amazing writing. I love how your style changes from John to Meg's POV. I noticed you mentioned earlier it was hard for you to write in John's POV, but I think you handle it perfectly. You have the essence of your characters down, and write a beautiful story line to wind them together. Kira Love |
Mister Satire chapter 24 . 10/7/2007 It was wonderful, of course. Why'd you change the prologue? I actually liked it. I mean, I enjoyed reading the new one, but I was looking forward to reading how in the world Meg got pushed off a balcony. Now you don't mention it in the prologue. Anyway, I'm sorry that I'm probably wasting a review spot thingy, but this was spectatcular and the suspense is killing me. Keep writing~ |
BregoBeauty chapter 23 . 10/5/2007 Great filler chapter! It was nice to see Gwen and Meg talking and discussing-I think Meg really needed that talk. It seems like Gwen is going to be able to help her a lot. Sorry it took me so long to read/review. I'm kinda grounded from the computer, so that's why this is so short. Anyways, keep up the excellent work and update soon! :) |
Mister Satire chapter 22 . 10/1/2007 Oh. My. God. This was wonderful! The suspense was killing me... and that thing about Dag shocked me. I can't wait for the next chapter. |