|Reviews for Stripping You and Your Love
| LaxerTheKing chapter 35 . 9/9/2020
First off, the story had a lot of spelling and grammatical errors. And by a lot, I mean at least 80% of the sentences were grammatically incorrect. There weren't exactly spelling errors but missing out of letters in certain words was pretty common. I mean, you can't exactly make out the word 'post' from 'ost', as a result of which there were sentences which didn't make any sense at all. I understand English is not your first language so it must have been quite difficult for you, but you could have very well published it in your first language, or got someone to proof-read your chapters (Please get someone to proof read your chapters). Another thing that I noticed was that you often got your characters' names exchanged (For e.g., you once referred a pair as 'Bob and his mom', which I suppose should have been 'Eric and his mom' or 'his mom and Peterson'). And I don't know whether you used a language translator or wrote it all on your own, but certain words you used are actually non-existent.
Coming to the plot, I found it extremely repetitive. Honestly, all Jake and Kimberly ever did was either fight or have sex/try to seduce each other (except for the 1% of time, they were actually talking to each other in a civil manner). Had the story been three-fourth of what it is, it would have been much better.
But I would say, despite all of that, I didn't wanna stop reading at all. While I did skip a lot of parts, I was very much entranced by the story. It's like the suspense element was embedded in practically every part of the story. Whenever I thought of giving up on story, the urge to know what's gonna happen next, how are the characters gonna react in a certain scene, how are people gonna find out about Kim's secret, and a lot more such questions would pop into my mind, thus, preventing me from doing so.
So, if you could revise your work, polish up the English, and remove some lines, I think it would be a big improvement to the story.
| Du chapter 35 . 11/29/2015
Hi. First off, I was reading some of the reviews you've gotten for this story and I AM PISSED! Although I consider English to be my first language, I'm half Spanish half British, and I've been raised in Spain. For you to have English as your second language and be able to pull off a 34-chapter hell of a story is AMAZING! I didn't so much find spelling errors, but grammar ones that come out of literal translations from your mother language. I have taught most of my friends English, and their most common mistakes are using wrong tenses and misplacing prepositions. I know how hard it is, and I must say you have fared very well! So just IGNORE all the buttheads who give you excessive criticisim for your mistakes, because there aren't nearly as many as they claim. It's not like they made the story unreadable. It made perfecty good sense anyway!
And now. With that said, I LOVED THIS STORY! I didn't expect it to be half as complex as it turned out to be. Reading the summary I thought it would be just a normal angsty fic, the type you can read a chapter every once in awhile when you're bored... I never expected to love it so much! I couldn't turn off my mobile phone! I even made extra trips to the toilet at work just so I could take out my phone and read in peace... You had me hooked from the very beginning. I loved the progression of the story. I loved Kim and I loves Jake. To me it wasn't sexist at all. Of course, he was a jealous prick, but aren't all guys? It was a fantastic read. Really. Thank you for writing this! Please never take it down, because I know I will come back to read it. And I'll recomment just to let you know I'm still basking in your works.
Seriously. I would say it's wonderful in Portuguese, but even though it's similar to Spanish I know zero zilch nada of Portuguese. So here goes in Spanish: me parece una historia MARAVILLOSA! Me encantó. Gracias GRACIAS por escribirla (obrigada?).
Fabulous job at writing, at conveying emotions, at keeping the reader hooked. And in a language which is not what you're used to. I'm speechless (yep, I'm obviously not speechless 'cause this is really long, but you get what I mean). Best wishes!
| Tay chapter 2 . 7/25/2015
This story has so much potential, but it's super underdeveloped. The characters also need to undergo a lot more development, but it's not a bad start. I would suggest revising this, if possible. I mean, you may not care, but whatever.
| Guest chapter 35 . 7/6/2014
Jake has zero redeeming qualities. I liked Kimberly but she's weak for accepting him so easily after everything he did. He was 100% a total douchebag
| Grespitchied chapter 35 . 7/1/2014
This is to comment on another comment but I don't thing the story was sexist at all with the way Jake acted to everything. Asides from the flaws of the character that made him stubborn it was also Kimmys weakness to ' give up'
I'm extremely impressed its how this story has gone! I didn't expect it to be this long and have all of those things occur. It really got frustrating especially after the hospital thing and ERIC! I truly understood the vengeance that he had and how it in sync to how to portrayed him.
I loved this story! It was so enjoyable to read! And the sex stuff wasn't obscene. Thank you so much for creating this story. I don't care about the spelling ,mistakes or the grammatical errors because it's very impressive for someone that doesn't have English as a first language to create a story this well and this long! GOOD JOB!
| Dominique Diane chapter 35 . 4/6/2014
I read this story a time ago and I thought it was fascinating. I still do, but because I didn't have time to write a review before I'm writing you a short one now. I loved this story, really. I cried when Jake was ignoring her and was going with that other women and Eric was giving them a hard time.
| believe1nbeauty chapter 35 . 12/24/2013
I saw a couple of your reviews and saw how negative they were, which made me so upset! -.-' Because this is an awesome story! I loved it!
You're really talented at writing, so keep it up! Loved this story! :D
| Guest chapter 35 . 9/23/2013
I loved it! Good job!
| Guest chapter 27 . 9/23/2013
ARGHHHHHH ERIC IS GETTING ON MY NERVES
| Lulu chapter 35 . 8/18/2013
I think this story has many flaws, its so sexist, Jake is an asshole through and through, he finds out the woman he loves is a stripper and then treats her like shit despite saying he loves her. Then he expects her to forgive him for the way he treated her just because he asked and barely even grovelled. He goes on to act the victim, instead of fighting for her, he decides to not only leave her while she's pregnant, he gives her a job and proceeds to treat the mother of his child with more hostility than if she were a bug. I think you portray emotion very well, but a decent man with a moral compass who's in love would never treat someone the way he's treated Kimberley. He would have grovelled for a long time, taken her back in a heartbeat, taken responsibility for his part in the heartbreak and never abandoned the mother of his child. He's done none of that. The irony is that Eric is the better man in this story but made to look like the villain, despite everything he's done, he's done out of love even if it hurt his brother, he was following his heart and in the end he became selfless and decided that he wants the woman he loves to be happy even if it isn't with him...
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/11/2013
OMG ITS 'TONED BODY' NOT 'TAMED BODY' WHAT THE FUCK DYSLEXIC BITCH
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/11/2013
OMG WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK. Do you even know english? Its like you're mentally challenged?! You're ruining the story with your crappy language. Why don't you get someone to fucking proof read it for you?
| Black is Beautiful chapter 35 . 6/8/2013
I loved it! Absolutely loved it! Shame we didn't get to find out the sex of the baby though but anyway this is definitely going on my favourites!
| Hop3lesS-Romantic-GirL chapter 35 . 4/8/2013
Absolutely LOVED this story! Good job!
| Char chapter 35 . 1/26/2013
Truly enjoyed this story! Thank you for sharing your gift!