I love the irony in this. Great work.

~Jill

Interesting...I like it though. Great job!

Gemma

i often wonder what goes through your kind when you write these lovely haiku's, because there just filled realness and can teach you so much especially this one

Mate, that s what I call hardcore haiku! I still dunno what to think about it - I am sort of shy in writing and this is quite cheeky. You ve gone quite a way since Mako Eyes...: ) (I ve been very remiss in reviewing lately, only posting). Geetings to Oz. b a

The title is very fitting because of the use of "lick". It is also very tragic because his efforts were in vain. I really like the imagry in this haiku because it leaves less to the imagination than haikus traditionally do. (Way to break the mold! Just joking).

Shea

Perfect. I love how you can take life, so perfectly, and make it shine in the form of a haiku. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.

this put to to a grin...

nice...

Ooh, one of those great paradoxes. Nice. I love the title. Very simple, but it says so much. Fantastic. Keep writing! :)

Oh, a marvelous contrast. This depicts so much in haiku form. Very well written. Great haiku.

oh MAN! this is so INSANELY clever! muhahaha. what a play on words - it makes you feel guilty just reading it. nice job. XD

Good use of metaphor... at least that's what i take it to mean. well done.

I'm usually not a big fan of haikus, mostly because I find that it's challenging to express a whole thought in a few lines. But you...you did the impossible...I appluad you...and the peom...short and concise like a haiku is supposed to, but the meaning of your kaiku, or at least the one I felt from it, hit me with full force...instantly. A beautiful peom...