Reviews for Sweet Girl
lifelessbreath chapter 1 . 9/3/2007
I love the irony in this. Great work.

~Jill
Gemma Lovell chapter 1 . 5/19/2007
Interesting...I like it though. Great job!

Gemma
walkinyourshadow chapter 1 . 4/11/2007
i often wonder what goes through your kind when you write these lovely haiku's, because there just filled realness and can teach you so much especially this one
Basnirka amaterka chapter 1 . 4/5/2007
Mate, that s what I call hardcore haiku! I still dunno what to think about it - I am sort of shy in writing and this is quite cheeky. You ve gone quite a way since Mako Eyes...: ) (I ve been very remiss in reviewing lately, only posting). Geetings to Oz. b a
theory of black chapter 1 . 4/4/2007
The title is very fitting because of the use of "lick". It is also very tragic because his efforts were in vain. I really like the imagry in this haiku because it leaves less to the imagination than haikus traditionally do. (Way to break the mold! Just joking).

Shea
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 4/1/2007
Perfect. I love how you can take life, so perfectly, and make it shine in the form of a haiku. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.
Basara chapter 1 . 4/1/2007
this put to to a grin...

nice...
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 3/31/2007
Ooh, one of those great paradoxes. Nice. I love the title. Very simple, but it says so much. Fantastic. Keep writing! :)
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 3/30/2007
Oh, a marvelous contrast. This depicts so much in haiku form. Very well written. Great haiku.
water lily nymph chapter 1 . 3/29/2007
oh MAN! this is so INSANELY clever! muhahaha. what a play on words - it makes you feel guilty just reading it. nice job. XD
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 3/29/2007
Good use of metaphor... at least that's what i take it to mean. well done.
BeautyntheBreak chapter 1 . 3/29/2007
I'm usually not a big fan of haikus, mostly because I find that it's challenging to express a whole thought in a few lines. But you...you did the impossible...I appluad you...and the peom...short and concise like a haiku is supposed to, but the meaning of your kaiku, or at least the one I felt from it, hit me with full force...instantly. A beautiful peom...