|Reviews for Bodies, Passing in the Night|
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 5/24/2007
i'm so glad you finished it with the heartbeat.
because as i read through it, i figured that was the point-
especially after the reference to it in the middle of the page.
it really made me smile that you ended it with that.
this peice was really good.
i like the tone and flow of it and how it slow and stops and speeds up right where it is supposed to in order to fit meaning to the words.
the words, though, were a little simple in this one.
not that i'm complaining because they made a very pretty story,
but, yeah-it doesn't really matter anyway. not like any one would re-write it.
good job, though.
i like your stuff.
| dollface and her cancer chapter 1 . 3/30/2007
there's a kind of macabre curl to this that makes it powerful. "she curves her way up easy, thumbs, and" is my favorite line, for the way the line itself does this sly, sliding dance when you read it. and your finale is so starkly perfect. it's morbid, and it's damn good.
| Jamestastic chapter 1 . 3/30/2007
i really liked it, and theres something about it that makes it so... i dont know. something positive, though