|Reviews for Not so Happily Ever After|
| Anxiety chapter 17 . 8/2/2007
Somehow, her punishment is even worse than what I had imagined... not too sure at the moment what had gone through my head when I thought about what part of her humanity, but this definitely wasn't it. The following chapters should be interesting.
| Mistress DragonFlame chapter 17 . 8/2/2007
I think the Ghost walker would have a little more sympathy and understanding to Zorana. I mean, white hair and purple eyes are one thing, but a metal glove for a hand? A bit worse.
| Mistress DragonFlame chapter 16 . 8/1/2007
Ah, fem-slash, how I love thee.
However, the main problem I have with this story is that Zorana is a bit of an ass, and there's nothing really special about her. Normally main characters have something they can do well-draw, sing, play an instrument, fight, etc. From what I've seen, Zorana can supposedly fight, but in the fights she's been in, she's not much stronger then her opponates, if weaker. If she was the champion person thing of an Inner Kingdom, I'd think she'd be a much better fighter then she is.
| Anxiety chapter 16 . 7/31/2007
Well, that was a chapter that appeared to do nothing but reinforce what we were told in the previous chapter. It was still interesting to see it from her perspective, though, and was certainly interesting. I'm still waiting anxiously to see what part of her humanity will be taken away in Soul Pond... so I'm hoping that you don't update like I do...
| Sy Itha chapter 16 . 7/31/2007
YAYAYAYAY! _ Whoot! Update! thank you so much!
| Anonymous chapter 15 . 7/26/2007
Great story, can't wait for the next chapter!
| And-on-Anonymous chapter 15 . 7/23/2007
Hmm, complicated, but good! I'm so annoyed- the computer won't let me see chapter 14, and i had to skip it out completely...
Well, after those ominous hints about the future from Golem i'm excited to see what's happening nex more than ever, i hope they're alright!
| PrettyAwkward chapter 15 . 7/22/2007
Pretty weird, but good.
| Sy Itha chapter 15 . 7/22/2007
You're right the next chapter will be fun for you won't it? I wonder where they'll go...
| Anxiety chapter 15 . 7/22/2007
Well well well, this had to be the primest time for your computer to break down. I had already gotten used to (and started to love) the idea of daily updates, and the chapter brought up so many interesting (and not really all that confusing) ideas that I want to know what happens and what part of Zorana's humanity is going to be lost in this soul pond... *sigh*... C'est la vie.
| ghostlygeorge chapter 15 . 7/22/2007
stop being so paranoid! i thought it was good!
| Sy Itha chapter 14 . 7/21/2007
Aw. I like it. Poor Zorana...going to get all poisioned...tisk tisk...
| PrettyAwkward chapter 14 . 7/21/2007
Posion, thats pretty bad. Good chapter.
| anti-climax chapter 2 . 7/21/2007
Oh wow. You took an iconic character (the Black Knight) and made him a her. Haha, nice.
Liked the line about the author being out of work )
Small errors here and there like in 'It’s not problem'. But other than that, it's nice and engaging and uncliched.
| Anxiety chapter 14 . 7/20/2007
O true scribe, thy updates are quick! (sorry, couldn't resist)
Things seem to be moving rather fast between those two, it'll be interesting to see how that develops.
Now, with you updating so quickly (once a day, it's nice, it's quick, I like it) you tend to be missing some easy things grammatically. Take "Birds of a father flock together," although it is probably a true statement, it just doesn't carry the same ring or familiarity as "Birds of a feather..." There was another one, I thought, but after pretty much re-reading it I didn't find it. Taking a few extra minutes to re-read what you have written is a good way to find those things and make minor changes to make things more clear... if you don't do that already.