Reviews for Not so Happily Ever After
Anxiety chapter 14 . 7/20/2007
O true scribe, thy updates are quick! (sorry, couldn't resist)

Things seem to be moving rather fast between those two, it'll be interesting to see how that develops.

Now, with you updating so quickly (once a day, it's nice, it's quick, I like it) you tend to be missing some easy things grammatically. Take "Birds of a father flock together," although it is probably a true statement, it just doesn't carry the same ring or familiarity as "Birds of a feather..." There was another one, I thought, but after pretty much re-reading it I didn't find it. Taking a few extra minutes to re-read what you have written is a good way to find those things and make minor changes to make things more clear... if you don't do that already.
Hamish chapter 13 . 7/20/2007

you're writing a lot!

I like your story too it's very creative
Sy Itha chapter 13 . 7/20/2007
THANK YOU! I like it! Ghost walker amuses me to no end...I love her so...
PrettyAwkward chapter 13 . 7/20/2007
She finally knows, I wonder why the Ghost Walker hadn't said anything about the Black Knight being a girl, she said the things that the black kinght was thinking about Faranea, Im sure she was thinking about herself as a girl. well anyways, Faranea knows, its good. update soon.
And-on-Anonymous chapter 13 . 7/20/2007
yay! Great chapter :)

i thought that was really good, i like the way you kept their characters- bit where faranea slapped her, and didn't make it immediately soppy, but it did have a hint of romance to make it exciting... good times :)

Looking forward to the next installment!
Anxiety chapter 13 . 7/20/2007
So the armor is off... Faranea took it rather well. Now, it would appear, comes the hard part... actually getting to third base. Honestly, though, I hope that their relationship doesn't come too easy, I mean Faranea can't so quickly overcome all that Zorana did as the black knight... at least she shouldn't. Doing so would just seem wrong, too quick, and overly romanticized. I just hope you don't rush it to the point of it being unbelievable. Well, anyway, I should probably go before I start to ramble. Good job.
ghostlygeorge chapter 13 . 7/20/2007

I'm so happy the stupid armor is gone! I heart you!
PrettyAwkward chapter 12 . 7/19/2007
Good chapter, things are heading in a good direction. update soon.
Jamith chapter 1 . 7/19/2007
yay, I love shakespear, and your chapter titles make me smile inside. I also love the way to put the fairytale elements in here.
And-on-Anonymous chapter 12 . 7/19/2007
Hmm, interesting- i'm intrigued to see what going to come of the hint you left us at thend...

Well, first impressions can be wrong- Ghost Walker seems ok I like the way you gave us a bit of insight into her character and backed it up etc.

Loved the bit where Black Knight got embarrased about Faranea's hair and said 'well it is..' Hilarous!

As always, looking forward to the next one :)
Sy Itha chapter 12 . 7/19/2007
YAY! she's not a heartless bitch! WHOO!
Anxiety chapter 12 . 7/19/2007
Why is it that I have a feeling that good things aren't going to happen like she thinks they are?

I wouldn't really call this chapter boring, and it certainly seemed important, drawing out more about the character of Ghost Walker and her relationship with Zorana. By the seems of it, though, it would have a greater importance than that judging by what you said at the start of the chapter.

You're really cranking these things out fast, and it is sorta starting to show. You made a few simple mistakes (using 'here' when you meant 'hear' for one thing... and possibly the only thing, I don't recall).

By the way, does Ghost Walker know Zorana is female? I'm not too certain if she would or not judging by the way you described her mind-reading abilities.
ghostlygeorge chapter 12 . 7/19/2007
HM tasty plot.

weirdest review ever lol!
guu-sama chapter 12 . 7/19/2007
Awesome. I really enjoyed this update. Can't wait for your next one!
Anxiety chapter 11 . 7/18/2007
And the plot thickens. this is turning out to be quite an interesting story. As usual, I am anxiously awaiting the next chapter.

By the way, if you are putting the others on hold to finish this, does this mean that the story is almost done? It'd be almost a shame if it was...
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