Reviews for Unwanted Guardian: Redux
ForgotMyInfoOops chapter 23 . 9/30
So great to know you're updating this!
Daneeno chapter 21 . 2/23
You are honestly one of my all time favorite authors on this website and I wish you the best of luck! Your stories have honestly made me love this website and no matter what happens I am glad to have read what I have.
Indiriel chapter 17 . 1/7
Hm... honestly it get's a bit confusing at times with everyone having their own experiences at the same time? Well ok not really but it is I dunno how to explain it but I for one like to concentrate on one maybe two plots? But you managed to squeeze three in one chapter xD which kinda takes away from some of the subplots... in a way... but maybe you'll explain more in the next chapter?
And when it comes to the size of the Chapters I for one would like smaller ones simple because it will not take so much concentration with each chapter... and they wont take as long to get trough so to speak XD but than again that only happened to me now that their is less lighthearted smut/fluff to kinda break up the drama and heaviness of the chapters in this version of UG.

Indie
Indiriel chapter 16 . 1/7
Now that you mention it I kinda miss the Rori/Jason smut/fluff xD coz honestly their hasn't really been any "" and the romance has been left hanging long ago, maybe that's the reason it is no longer present in your description? Even thought like I said I miss it dearly... sure it is cool to get a deeper inside into everybody but at the same time you are pretty much sacrificing something which made the first draft of UG so addictive and that was the relationship between Rori and Jason which also meant some lighthearted encounters which this version is missing so far... which and yes I am repeating myself I really do miss :/ if by any chance you could maybe get a balance going between smut and detailed character development it would make for one heck of a story :)

*hugs* Indie
Indie 2.0 chapter 15 . 1/7
Ok he is a Muse now? I wonder why you changed that one o.o and what purpose it will have in the Storyline of your's because right at that moment I can't really see where it would go other than maybe some sort of menthorship but than again what would he know more than what Jason allready does... maybe how to cope after once mind has been wiped clean and you have to start from scratch?
And that reminds me while being on my walk with my dog I was thinking about what a nice present it would make for Jason if someone would make him something like a scrapbook or maybe a video reminding him of things should he lose his memory again... kinda like in the movie 50 first dates :D I bet it would mean a lot to him... good way to get in his pants to :P

Indie
Indie 2.0 chapter 14 . 1/6
It's funny to think that in certain Countries you can actually get kicked out of school and not go to another one xD Here your parents go to jail if you don't go to school until your 16 years or older...
Other than that lil fact... how an adult like Julian could let is symptoms get so far is beyond me, I freakin take a painkiller when I so much has feel the beginnings of a headache :P

Indie
Indiriel chapter 13 . 1/6
I love Yami 3 he should end up with jason and not Rori XD they would make a nice couple hehehe Jason all fire and storm and Yami cool water and calmness :D would make for a good balance in my book.
And Rori... well what can one say about Rori other than, get your fucking head out of your ass and look around at what your doing you might just notice a thing or two XD

Indie
Indiriel chapter 12 . 1/6
Well Jason pretty much summed it up in the end xD
Indiriel chapter 11 . 1/6
What could Julian do? Did he really just ask that? I mean really? Am I the only one thinking ARE YOU FUCKIN KIDDING MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE? And sorry for being so loud but arrgggggggggg... I just wanne rip all of their heads of and screw them on right, coz they obviously haven't had a clear freakin thought since forfreakinever! So let me get you started their Jason on what Julian and Rori both could have done and that is something which does require absolutely fucking NOTHING but money... yes money... money to send him back to Morgen... support him their have him away and happy but NOOO that would be to easy and yup not very good for the story I get that XD but still it makes me freakin mad

Other than that good chapter even thought nothing really happened? XD Because well it is just Jason and Julian spinning circles...

Indie
Indiriel chapter 9 . 1/6
Oh I forgot to comment on this Chapter xD but than again it was kinda late yesterday so my bad """ anyways what is their to say?
If I would have been one of the people living in Bloodstar Manor... I would have packed up my things taken Jason and just moved as far away as I could, coz honestly I would rather half starve and freeze to death than watch one of my friends get raped without me so much as saying something about it... nope never ever
So what if I would work freaking 12 hour shifts at some go damned job, would not even face me, if it meant someone I care for being safe and sound.

Indie
Indiriel chapter 10 . 1/6
Well what did he expect? Building a freaking Manor and turning it into a supernatural Daycare xD That no one would notice? The world has gotten far to small for shit like that get with the program Rori :P he really should catch up to the current time and make some changes otherwise it will be all to easy for anyone to take his lil secrets and run with them...

Other than that... what an ass seriously ohhhhh poor old Rori has suffered for oh so long and has yet to even think about changing himself truly he is as selfish as they come and no matter his good intentions in the end when his true self takes over he will leave it all behind in order to preserve himself... he can fool himself all he wants and make romantic notions of his true feelings and intentions but in the end all that will be left is him walking on the ashes of the people he swore to love and protect... and only if he truly comes to not just except that fact but work on it to change it will it ever turn out differently!

Indie
Indiriel chapter 8 . 1/5
Just imagine someone like Rori please for a second in a normal day to day environment... what would we call someone like him? Well rapist for starters but it really goes deeper than that... more like he turns into a Psychopath leaving his emotions by the door and simply taking what he wants without any regard to the feelings of others... and honestly I have no idea how someone would overcome a trauma like that, it seems pretty much impossible especially with the very same person which is responsible for said trauma, I dunno how that would work and if it would it would take years and the body? Even if the mind say's go the body has muscle memory and those sucker's will size up when touched believe me I know o_O so yeah this chapter just makes me sad and in a way angry because I know you don't mean to make light of rape but honestly... no rape victim no matter if they loved their rapist before would be able to have any sort of relation with them for freaking years!

On a positive note: I also always loved the smell of chlorine makes me feel like home whenever I smell it since swimming was a huge part of my life for a very long time and this chapter and the way you described it just reminded me of it :D
Indiriel chapter 7 . 1/5
Ahhhhh a nice dose of fluff and sexiness just what one needed after so much drama xD Jason needs to learn do relax a bit more and not wind himself up like that than he would have a much longer life expectancy :P other than that I really do wonder if one can share the one they love... and if one can make expectations of the other and yet not have them for oneself... Rori should kinda work on himself if you ask me because even thought Julian takes his site and pretty much say's he is to old to learn new tricks, I would like to disagree and hope that Rori will learn that he is not the only one who can make demands and have them be followed

Indie
Indiriel chapter 6 . 1/5
I just remembered the first time reading this and being all kiddy with all the possibilities of Rori caring for Jason in all the right way's hrhrhr so I'm gonna jump too the next chapter and have a looksie

Indie
Indiriel chapter 5 . 1/5
Ok I dunno why it has always seemingly slip my mind when it came to this chapter and me commenting on it but I am German and have lived in Ireland and England for over 9 years :) and I just have all these lovely memories whenever I reed your story simple because of your characters being from the same countries as I am :D
And because it has and will always keep bugging me here are some grammar corrections when it comes to Artemis and her German

It's "meine liebe" or you could also so say "meine kleine" (my little one)
Oh zur Hölle fahren und sterben" not really a sentence XD it's "fahr doch zur Hölle und sterb..."
"Du dummer blutsaugenden Pädophilen" again grammatical off "du dummer blutsaugender Pädophile"

Other than that I can offer you some help in the German department if you ever need or want it

Regards Indie
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