Reviews for Night Wolf
SkyRunnerSparrow chapter 1 . 12/30/2009
I really like the topic! How intriguing! An elf princess/wolf...

You may want to work on sentence breaks and spelling. I caught no MAJOR problems though.
Miz Calixte chapter 5 . 12/6/2009
so, you gonna update anytime soon? cos i REALY think u should! :) keep it up!
someone elses angel chapter 3 . 5/6/2007
hey there bestest buddy old pal old friend of thought that i would let you know that, I NEED MORE! who took her? you wouldnt tell me. get working on it or i'll have to go eat your face. :) luv ya mookie-chan

someone elses angel chapter 5 . 4/22/2007
as your best friend it is my job to remind you how much people want your stories and how much you leave them hanging. that is why i am telling you to GET WRITING NOW! and just becouse im hooked too. :) in fact i think i will get to work on my story again. i havent written very much this weekend. ok no i started on that new story but i dont know if i like it that much. ok well get on messanger so i can talk to you. im bored. luv ya

PrettyPony chapter 5 . 4/22/2007
A bit too vague and fast paced. Everything seems to be rushed. Could do with with a bit more detail.

No offence intended, just trying to give some advice.
RavenclawMoose chapter 5 . 4/21/2007
This story has some really humongous plot holes and the characters are so far rather two dimensional. If Nya is a princess, she is hardly going to have time to stand on a mountain and watch the sunset every night, especially if she's next in line for the crown. She'll be far too busy learning how to be queen when the time comes for her to take over.

Onto Tyron: The whole, "You're smile captived me since you were born" sounds a bit pedophilic to me... Then there's the whole love thing. In the time in which I'm assuming your story is set, it was perfectly normal for royalty and nobles to have arranged marriages. In fact, it would be unusual for someone to marry for love rather than power and family ties.

Nya herself is far too Mary Sue. She's beautiful and has a hot love interest, and I'll bet she's intelligent too, or picks things up really quickly. And she's got the special power of turning into an awsome beautiful wolf every night and running through the woods all night. And then when she tries to get peasant clothes, rather than getting a dress or skirt and blouse, she goes for shorts (shorts, of all things! peasants did not wear shorts!) and a shirt. Duh! she still stands out! Not because of her beauty, but because she's a woman wearing smexy peasant shorts.

The people in the market place did not seem very typical peasant-y either. They would not have just bowed to her and acted like it was perfectly normal for their princess to be wandering through a market holding a random guy's hand and not followed by guards or any sort of escort. And the woman she bought the peasant clothes from would have been /really/ suspicious of why her princess wanted peasant garb.

In addition to these and other plot holes, your description is a bit lacking. It's not good to say she changed into a wolf, than two sentances later it's daylight again and she's a princess. There is not really bad description there so much as no description at all. Your lack of description makes much of the story confusing.

I'm not trying to be mean; I'm just trying to give you some constructive criticism. Please consider this and do not get mad. This only meant to be purely objective criticism of your work and in no way reflects upon you as a person. Thank you.

RynDevien chapter 2 . 4/8/2007
Oh my goodness! LOOVE IT! You describe things beautifully. I can't wait to read more! How awesome is it that the werewolf thing (not exactly werewolf but I dunno) is back and improving? Anyway I loved the more poetic words you used. "Creepy" wasn't exactly poetic but really I can't think of anything wrong with it.