Reviews for Y In The Lines
Nemonus chapter 1 . 4/15/2007
The situation, whatever happened, feels real. You have some grammar troubles: "Were waiting" should be 'we're' I think; all "Its" in the fifth and third-to-last line should be 'it's'; "andnd" is an obvious typo; "love struck" needs a dash. Not bad.
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 4/14/2007
Emotion filled and poignant, this really captures the connection well. I like the lack of specific detail, names, places, etc.., it really forces the reader to interpret the actual situation more closely. Very well written.
PocoSnow15 chapter 1 . 4/14/2007
Wow, that was so awesome! I loved the ending, it's so true for a lot of people. Very well done, I loved your emotion!