Reviews for Serenity
kt135146 chapter 1 . 2/14/2013
Beautiful, I love it!
Chasing Skylines chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
I really liked the imagery produced here with your words.

I also liked strong lines like, "Regret’s silent weeping." "The gusts of air meander their way through the maze of flowers and thorns," I liked that for the use of the word 'meander' because it's lazy sounding, goes with the calm before the storm. I also liked the way you used the word 'downcast' later on.

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RuathaWehrling chapter 1 . 6/7/2007
Lovely poem! A few technical comments first:

1.) "They populate the green fields and flow to the current of the wind." - I'd suggest "flow WITH the current", since flowing TO the current suggests they're moving toward the air, instead of following its flow.

2.) "It is the soft, yet painful sigh after a great disappointment," - I just really liked this line. I think to me it was the strongest line in the poem. Nice work!

Very nice! I really liked how you compare the quiet before the storm to human emotions and actions. Lovely job! Thanks for the read!

-Ruatha
The Monkey King of Pirates chapter 1 . 4/16/2007
Very beautiful! I am diding this to my favs!

*TSP