|Reviews for Typical me|
| miscellanea chapter 1 . 5/27/2008
I liked your line saying, "I sing to the clouds." It sounded very free and put a fresh image in my mind, which was nice. I also liked your line that says, "swarming around me..." followed by, "I'm not that sweet." That was a cool concept, which is why I liked it.
In the seventh line, do you mean 'pray' instead of 'praise'? Your weakest rhyme would have to be night/daylight. I would try to replace those. I think that you should maybe take third person point of view and describe yourself. This might give you more literary freedom.
| Williamchan87 chapter 1 . 4/17/2007
hehehe...you go lots of beuaty... and im sure the person you gave a kiss to sure can't resist...
| Sophia Lee chapter 1 . 4/16/2007
that's really pretty! i like the rhythm.