Reviews for Breaking The Mirror |
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![]() ![]() I'm here just cause the last few pages of reviews have been so ridiculous. This story is among the best I have ever read on dp, I can't believe people are actually nitpicking on its grammar and spelling! I read this for the first time a little under ten years ago and I still come back to it and read parts of it again and again. I don't do that for many stories with correct grammar and spelling on here.. that's not why this has 2k reviews, it's because the writer has created something absolutely touching, strong characters and a sense of something magical. I'm sure if this was ever edited and published by the author it would look completely different and shiny, and when I praise this story I am not blind to its errors but appreciative of its strength as a first draft and its enduring charm. I hope you, dear writer, are proud of your work and that you continue to write beautifully. And thank you, always, for sharing this story on fp, for not removing it no matter how many years have passed, and for letting us meet Jay and Seaton. |
![]() ![]() Jayden is a fucking pussy fuck u |
![]() ![]() ![]() That story had an amazing plot. Well written. Grammatical errors were throughout the story which detracted a little, but overall it was a fantastic read! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story is fantastic and very well-written. The development between the two main characters are very well described. |
![]() ![]() Wow! That dirty talk at the end had me so excited and then he was like 'go to sleep'... Seaton you fucking tease! |
![]() ![]() This was iconic. I mean... I would have lived for a hot sex scene between sea and jay, but girl I guess it was good without too. This old ass fucking story though. 2007? almost written 10 years ago. I think about where I was when it was written. what I thought about when I was 9 years old. I don't know where this story went, and maybe you would consider a second story, but damn this was CUTEEEEE to today. I hope jay got some bomb ass fucking dick after this and got his bussy slain, but IDK you tell me. |
![]() ![]() great story. some typos. oh, and you used the wrong "your" a few times. jsyk a few chapters ago when the little girl called Jayden J.J. and he commented about how he hadn't been called that or something but his father did call him that once when Jayden said he'd help with the drug dealing. it really shook me up, hearing about the abuse and everything. great writing as far as that goes. it's all a horrible reminder that these things happen to people and that those people don't always get help. i feel blessed. i don't like that Jayden never talked to the therapist and ended up with Seaton. I'd be cool if Seaton waited until he was at least 18, but preferably just a few years before giving in to temptation. or if Jayden had talked to the therapist about everything and then ended up with Seaton. but the whole thing makes me uncomfortable. even though we know Seaton probably wouldn't take advantage of the situation. and then in this last chapter he said some things that made the ending a little off-putting. so idk how i really feel about the ending and the Seaton part. like, i want them to be together but it's a little not right how it happened in my opinion. but otherwise it was great. i liked the teacher as a character (and personally think Jayden should have lived with him and not Seaton at the end. then, if they did end up dating at least they weren't living together). thanks for the great read. i stayed up about three hours later than i meant to, which i will regret tomorrow. keep writing. |
![]() ![]() Honestly a good story, though the numerous spelling errors are distracting. Having an editor, or just re-reading it might have helped, but overall, very engaging plot and characters. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Back for a re-read and enjoying it. Remembering how much I love his narrating voice and style :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm sure I've read this before, maybe this is rewrites? Either way this is such q good story, really enjoyed it thank you |
![]() ![]() I remember reading this last year. It was the first story I read on this site (also my favorite) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wowww! These days i feel im eeading too much angst filled story, that i when i find one, i just pass and read the next one. But yours... i totally loved it! It was real, but it didn't make me cry a rive, i just wanted to more n more unfill it ended. Thanks i loved it. |
![]() ![]() This ending is perfect for this story, while it is somewhat disastifying (because what person doesn't want to have everything spoon fed to them) i still love it. You can still imagine what is going i work out for Jayden in the future and how he will eventually get a lot better, not 100% but better. Also, I do agree with you that any further attempt to move along Seaton's and Jaydon's relationship would be awkward. Thank you so much for this beautiful story. TerminallyStuck |
![]() ![]() ![]() Island of the Misfit Boy by Front Porch Step suits this story. And no offense but I didn't like this ending. :( Good story though. |