|Reviews for Contradiction|
| EternalxSnow chapter 65 . 2/3/2010
I wonder where Anko is? xD
Reply to what you said before:
I never have birthday parties D:
I stopped having them when I was 6 years old .
So, I can't consider having a birthday party T.T
| Lunaira chapter 65 . 1/25/2010
Yeah, it's been a while since you updated, but since this isn't the only story I read on FP, I'm fine when you don't update for weeks or even months. I think you should concentrate on the manga more, though, since you've finished the written version. Also, I think your FP readers wouldn't mind checking your site for the written updates, but then again, I have a proclivity for being incorrect when making inferences... XD; Anyways, I'll wait patiently for your next update
| EternalxSnow chapter 64 . 1/15/2010
Yay, the party is in June xD My birthday is in June... well, near the end of June anyways :P
| Just Another Writer chapter 1 . 12/19/2009
Hey there Ki Hiwatari. I've caught up with the chapters in your manga and I've read the majority of the chapters on the website. I'm sorry to say but even though some elements in your story are original, the romance and some parts seemed seems...Forced. I'm a romance fanatic and when I fee that the romance feels force, it's uncomfortable and I sometimes cant go through with it. In a way, i could compare it to Fruits Baskets.
**SPOILERS FOR THOSE WHO READ FRUITS BASKET** In the story, Tohru, Yuki and Kyo were in a relationship with one another. In a way, people thought Tohru would go to Yuki but instead, she went with Kyo but the characters grew. With Ruya, Toshino, and Ki, it feels too one sided and 2-dimensional. No matter WHAT Toshino does, Ruya wants Ki even though ki hasnt really shown signs that he returns her feelings. Even with Kyo in FB, he returned Tohru's feelings in one way or another.
Then, there's some things about Ruya I plain dont like. She seems like she's just...There instead of a main character. I think that Contradiction should have revolved around Ki instead of Ruya mainly. Because, even though Ki seems like a complete Jackass(in my opinion), he's FAR more interesting than Ruya. We dont really know that much about Ruya's past, the real reason why she was chosen to go to Teiou Academy or anything. She seems like she's just there.
I know I sound a bit mean but i dont mean to. I think that this story has ALOT more potential and can go a long way with some tweaking and such.
The grammar and the speaking I can let slide because English isnt really your first language. BUT, what i cant let go is the usage of 'san' 'sama' 'kun' 'chan' and such. Like with Hiwatari-kun, or Ruya-chan or Toshino-san, I feel that if you must use those endings, use them for cute nicknames.
EX: Usagi(Serena) from Sailor moon called Mamoru(Darien) 'Mamo-chan' and he called her 'Usako'. Cute nicknames. Like 'Hiwa-chan' or 'Toshi-chan' could be cute and good nicnames for close friends(and lovers). Otherwise, let them out. When you first read it, it's cute and it's like 'Wow, cool' but then afterwards, it tends to get annoying.
But that's just my two cents. Good potential but you got go the extra mile to make it EVEN better. _
| Lunaira chapter 64 . 12/3/2009
I just realized I didn't read the previous chapter when you updated it! I'm so sorry! TwT I've been very busy with school lately, so I tend to delete most e-mails appearing in my inbox that are irrelevant to school and my extracurricular activities. x-x I apologize again for not reviewing the last chapter.
Anyways, I'm happy that the story had succeeded a two-thirds completion already here on FictionPress, and I'll continue to [re]read any chapters you upload onto the site! I'll wait patiently for your next update, as always, and I promise to review as soon as I see the e-mail update next time. XD
| clyne-mikiyo chapter 1 . 11/18/2009
Hey Ki, hope you continue to update. Love this story! xD
| Luna the wolf dancer chapter 2 . 11/15/2009
interesting chapter, I'm off to read the next one..
| eternalxsnow chapter 63 . 11/7/2009
I agree with Ken! Ruya-chan is cute xD And I prefer her too :3
| Darkamber8828 chapter 1 . 10/12/2009
| EternalxSnow chapter 62 . 9/16/2009
This story is getting better and better each chapter :D
| bumblevee chapter 1 . 9/14/2009
First chapter, I know, and I have a long way to read XD Anyway, this sounds like a great story, and I read a few pages of the manga, and your art is GREAT. Although I have on problem. It's to . . . formal I guess. You know you could use contractions. Like: She's instead of she is. We'll instead of we will and so on. That's the thing that really bugs me. But no worries, lots of people write formally (I guess thats one way to put it) so it's okay. I just prefer contractions and such. Other than that, it's guh-rate! Oh sheesh, I've been reading to many Clique novels XD
| pinkcar7956 chapter 62 . 9/14/2009
I LUV THIS STORY SO MUCH!
| Luna the wolf dancer chapter 1 . 9/12/2009
cool series ) I actually saw your website before. 0-0 my god you are a good artist - I will read more soon and I promise I hope you will read my stories too ) You will be seeing more reviews from me
by the way, whats wrong with chapter 62? 0-0 I tried to read it before and nothing happen 0_0 anywho see you on chapter too
| EternaxSnow chapter 61 . 8/7/2009
Hm, if my dad suddenly came back to me after so many years I would probably be angry too. Well less angry than Ki and I might accept that he was my dad. o.o I don't mind having a dad like Ken Let us trade dads, lol xD
| pinkcar7956 chapter 61 . 8/1/2009
Thank u once agian! The manga is very good 2!