Omg this story was amazing! I’m really surprised it doesn’t have more reviews! Well, it’s their loss!

I'm sorry but pardon my language but Sophie is a dumbass

Man, I feel so bad for hope.

wow

excellent chapter. great emotion.

i luv paramore! _

aw i luv connor! excellent chapter. update soon. _

wow. excellent writing. great emotion. more soon please.

christian is too good to be true! lol. that was adorable. update soon.

oo caught! lol. they're cute. i like it. update soon

yay christian! cute. oo he's not gonna be real happy about wes huh? no... lol. update soon

Connor adds a bit of sex appeal to the story. (well, i think he's sexy even though i don't like emos) The fact that Sophie chooses Hope's boyfriends serves as another example of how she runs Hope's life, thought you didn't have to re-introduce Wes as Hope's ex in the second part of the chapter. The fact that Connor and Sophie despise each other is quite hilarious, and you remembered to include the effects of loud, obnoxious arguments on surroundings. Sophie's nickname for Hope's father also reminds the reader of how degrading she can be. The car ride from hell slighlty interprets the shallowness of Sophie, as is her catwalk. Another nice closing to the chapter.

the tone fits well with what Hope is feeling- a blend of somber expectance of what she has endured for years and the feeling that no one comprehends what she's feeling, or that they even notice her state of mind. you threw in a few obstacles to keep the reader engaged- good. i really like how you incorporate physical reactions to her emotions- excellent. i like how you threw in a little dillusion with the ring and the evil glint. the closing for the chapter sealed it off well. it still has a tad of the meg ryan feel, but now it's more you- perfect.

analysis of preface:

i remember this story. i like the pessimistic feel. you started with a common topic and elaborated- good. i love first person- lets the reader get in the character's head better than third person and whatnot. you have your style, (here comes the constructive critisicm) but it somewhat reminds me of meg ryan. i get this feel about the second paragraph. i'm done being cruel now. don't kill meh!

ahh i luv that movie too! even tho 10 things i hate about you is definitely a B movie. interesting chapter. i like christian more and more. update soon.

oo awkward! i've decided i like seth tho. good update. more soon.

cute. i think i like the relatives and christian. good chap. update soon.