|Reviews for Zephyr's Epiphany Part 4|
| Celia chapter 1 . 4/26/2007
hello avriladdict. ) your story is not bad. i like the opening. suspense and vocab is gd. but in part four i think everything is too ermm... placed out right in front of the reader. maybe u can try and work at paragraphing? a single sentence can cause greater impact but if u paragraph after every ques it's not as nice le. yup. will comment about ur nei4 rong2 nxt time ) keep up the gd work!