Reviews for Longing
Gabrielle C. Whitnall chapter 1 . 5/13/2007
Lots of frustrated emotions in this piece. I feel the anxiety you convey, feeling like you are trapped in a prison you cannot free yourself from. It may have been your intention to make the flow a bit rough but it would help to maybe go back through this one and smooth out the flow. Not that you can't keep the sense of anxiety and frustration you want to convey; you can. I think it would read better, move better if it felt more harmonious. I do like the rhyming scheme you use, too, and your choice of words. Let it go, let it flow!

Gabby