|Reviews for The Death of a Soldier, Birth of a Champion|
| Eternity's Rain chapter 1 . 12/28/2007
The way you use your words doesn't seem right, and the action is a bit clipped. The description and how you divide your paragraphs are OK though.
| Jenhmarie Dawn T Frias chapter 1 . 4/30/2007
ahh, how delicious...
but why did he commit suicide?
i loved your stories; i love action stories in general.