|Reviews for Blackened Soul|
| Ainu chapter 1 . 2/20/2011
Sorry to say this, but I'm glad you wrote and shared this.
I feel exactly this way myself, so...I dunno, misery likes company?
Very powerful wording used here. I like it a lot.
| wyckydgoddess chapter 1 . 5/8/2007
This is very good.
| A Dark Ray of Hope chapter 1 . 5/5/2007
wow. i can really feel the hopelessness here. and i love it. _
| surrealphobia chapter 1 . 4/30/2007
Thanks for reviewing my essay and poem.
This poem like a sad lament, at first I thought the speaker was angry about this wasteland we live in but then as the lines progressed it turned around completley. I love the metaphors and imagery, I can't wait to read more of your work!
| fire-breathing-kitten chapter 1 . 4/27/2007
This makes me VERY VERY SAD.
Mostly because I know the writer, and what an awesomely amazingly wonderful person he is and how lucky a mess like me is to know him and it annoys me lots that here it doesn't sound like he gets that. Those are not empty words, my friend :).
Good poem tho; I like the metaphor of the well, and the contrast you strike between your friends and yourself. You might want to take away the caps on "nothing" and the two ?'s, as they look unprofessional, but other than that, no big issues.
And yeah, about the I will forever be inferior thing...been there, lots. NOT ENJOYABLE.
| a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 4/25/2007
"My voice is cracked; my heart, a rock; my laugh, a drying spring."
That's an amazing line.
Overall, I liked this and found it quite relatable. There were some places where the rhythm seemed to be off to me, but all in all, good job.