The repitition of the first line is brilliance. Why can't they be in stanzas? It'd make it easier to read and to distinguish between thought. I love the rhyme scheme. It's so refreshing to hear a poem that can express thought and have a theme but still maintain decent rhyme and rhythm, you have no idea. I don't feel particularly drawn to the message or anything; in spite of that, I love that it at least has a good one and clearly expressed thoughts.

I like this poem. It's profound. It definitely makes me want to work on my empathy.

My favorite parts: "But your emotions will not start, For they are in a world apart" and "Though you cannot but blink an eye, For today is not your day to die." and the entire last section about the eagle.

I also like how you start each section of the poem with the word "Unfortunate" but then vary the two words that follow it. It made the poem sound very cool.

You sure have the mind of a poet :)

Keep writing.

Woah, really well written. And so powerful too. Amazing work! I'm speechless! Write on!

~Anna~ _