I finished the book... I NEED SEQUEL

WOOOOWWWW! you have been working on this story for a LONGGGGG time!

Aww

Okay, I haven't read very much but I already like where it's going, BUT what really confuses me is your formatting.
I honestly don't know when a new scene happens because it all looks the same? I constantly have to go back an re-read.

I'm so frustrated, I kinda of wish I didn't start reading this fic. \ Not saying you're a bad author, I just want to beat the fuck out of those guys. I'm pissed at the story. lol.

The most intense story I have ever read in my life. I have always found an interest in stories pertaining to these topics(and no I'm not I'm not some depressed person, or a victim of anything), but I have to say this story actually scared me. I have never read a story dealing with suicide. So that one part scared me shitless. Once I realized what was happening (at end)I almost never finished they story. I found myself feeling like Alexis, in how she missed zach so much. But really well written story (aside from the very descriptive details, and violence-those were scary).

Sorry if this review is a bit of a *SPOIL ALERT*

Just have to decide now if I want to put it on my favourites list!

so had she cut herself again or not? i'm confused.

what about logon? he's one of the main guys

this story was amazing and heartbreaking at some points. but still if i was a publisher I'd publish you.-jblstark

The romance, pain, etc. seemed to be laid on a little thick, but maybe that's what you were going for. Also, you seem to enjoy dialogue a little much. Description of the scene is just as, if not more so, important as the people in the scene. Think about revising?

A.S.

that was great :)

Okay first of all, a day is too short. Way too short. At least make it a week!

Annd you use a LOT of a dialogue, so much so that I find it hard to picture the scene in my head.

Also, anyone that has experienced severe grief WOULD understand why someone would cut themselves.

That said, I do love this story and I'm glad you're having a go at rewriting it :)

YourCritic

Dammit, I'm getting all teary!

The story brought me to tears at times.

It was good, though.

This story touches my heart in more ways than one could imagine. Alexis is me. I went through her pain. It is so hard to go through. The only difference is I never had a 'Logan' or a 'Riley' to help me through the pain