|Reviews for Starwing|
| CrimZeo chapter 3 . 4/27/2007
Read what i said before in my other review, since you seem to be rushing this a lot. Also, try getting a beta tester for your story and DO NOT ever post so many chapters at once anymore. IT's considered story suicide in this place.
| CrimZeo chapter 1 . 4/27/2007
I suppose I'll be the bad guy here. You have no descriptions of your characters, the details are very sparse, the speed of the story is too fast and you do not reveal any thoughts of the main character in any case, making the character seem bland and flat. Everyone has to go through this, even me, so I'm just imparting some collective wisdom for you and I'm sorry if I seem cruel. You WILL get better at writing stories if you keep working at it, so don't give up. If all else fails, revise this story and try again.