Reviews for A Twisted World
lijuan chapter 1 . 6/5/2010
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eiyuang999 chapter 1 . 5/24/2010
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Free Lernihan chapter 4 . 4/22/2009
I like this, keep going please!
iGhost chapter 1 . 6/26/2008
I like it.
Gale chapter 4 . 4/6/2008
I think you have a good concept going here. The 'secret' Tomi has runs the risk of becoming contrived, though, so I would be very careful about how you're going to make that come out in the open in the future.

I think your scenes are a little short. In fact, the third chapter, which you called the longest and most boring, had the most development to me because you just let the characters talk, and that's what they're supposed to do in most plays. I would like to see more development for Tomi, as a character. We don't get to see much about what she likes, and other than the fact that she has a 'secret', there's not much personality guiding her dialogue.

I look forward to future chapters.
kayttea chapter 3 . 7/5/2007
I wonder whats so important at the doctors. :) this is pretty neat, it being in play form.