Reviews for Excitement
shining defiance chapter 1 . 11/6/2007
I like that your brother uses all of his senses to talk about a subject that you usually wouldn't think of that way. unless it was a school assignment and I'm giving him too much credit- I'm sure I've done poems like that for school before. But nevermind if it's not. Also, I love the idea of a nine-year-old writing that last line. "Excitement rules me at times." It sounds so thoughtful and serious, and just picturing a kid saying that is kind of wicked cute. Nice job :D
Just Luke Staden chapter 1 . 5/2/2007
this wasn't your brother was it? i know your brother couldn't produce this. I mean i would expect more from him. now tell the truth, it was clearly one of yours disguised as his.
Olivine chapter 1 . 4/29/2007
Looks like one of those poems called... personification? I think. I remember having to write something like this in fifth grade or maybe seventh grade or something. But this was a nice, straightforward poem, which is something I'm very unused to reading (and writing). Tell your brother good job for me.

-Olivine. (Sapna Shanti/Wintertigress/Whatever else you remember me as)