|Reviews for Before the bottle drops|
| Insane-Rassbery chapter 1 . 4/29/2007
Your work is lovely: but my only critical comment is that if you want to make it more accesable, you may want to cut out some of the big words. (your vocabulary is far superior to mine, and I love this: but some people may think it's confusing and "hard")
This is of course up to you, and if you are writing for yourself I would do nothing, but if you're writing for the average American I may change the words...
| sweetxinsincerity chapter 1 . 4/28/2007
hmm. it's a little mystifying, but still sounds powerful. i'm not too sure how the title connects with the haiku though.