Reviews for Heart's Chocolate
Curls and Cantarella chapter 4 . 10/7/2007
Oh, how sad! Please update soon! I just now got into this, after looking for romance stories. So very sad! (sniffle) Favriote, and alert!
Melissa Norvell chapter 3 . 6/9/2007
Don't worry about your plot-planning. I often change mine three times before it gets written down for the final work. The unexpected last-minute twists are what make a plot of wonderful sometimes.

You're a very good writer, well to me. The only thing I can help you on at this point is a helpful hint. Don't use your character names so much. Try using things to describe your characters, that way the Nakana said phrases won't be repetitive and make your story seem boring.

Otherwise, I'd love to see what you do with this piece. It's very good.

Perhaps you could check out my newest story Sacrifice? I'd love it if you told me what you thought of it.
Inryoku chapter 1 . 5/16/2007
I'm not that into fluff, but I really liked this. The ending was bittersweet. I really really liked the last line too.
Abstruse Blue chapter 1 . 5/3/2007
Aww, this was cute. Though it made me hungry for some chocolate! Anywho, I'll be keeping an eye-out for more of your work. Good job!