nice begining (wow i spelt that horribly)Are you still writing it? It has been months since you last updated. I think you should go on with it, if you want.

Ah, the reckless wonders of youth. Brings back a few memories of my own. Simple, short yet fittingly appropriate prose to describe the subject matter :).

As a stand alone piece - this leaves me scratching my head. Moral purpose? Plotline? Or is just a moment in time. For if it is it's pretty hollow. That's just my POV. Do you have other stuff?

interesante, that is a very intriguing perspective: doing bad things even though you know they are bad... temptation.

This is deleriously powerfull.

You've left me thinking: I want more.

-Insane Rass.