This is one of those great under estimated stories on fictionpress. Please update soon.

My first thought when I read the words 'Nothing is Forever'? "Oh my f*ing God!" Yes, it was those words exactly. :D Nice chapter. Can't wait for the next one. I like how you've got it from the point of view of the guy who openly admits he likes the girl (Did that make sense? Probably not...) in some parts. I've always loved to read third person. And you don't do it too badly, either.

A couple of things, though. You need to work on your grammar more. Remember that punctuation still needs to be there inside quotation (") marks - I noticed a lot of mistakes like this: " “I think she might be falling for me just a little bit now “ " where you not only added a space before the quotation marks (I'm assuming they were typos, considering this is absolutely riddled with them), but also didn't put a full stop at the end of the sentence.

Also, the word is "Breathe" not "Breath" - I just noticed that in that little Cory stressing bit.

Other than that, I really enjoyed it. Re-read it. Fix your punctuation, typos and spelling. Trust me, bad puntuation and spelling detracts from the actual story, and it may be why you don't have as many reviews as you would probably like.

OH! And, where is this story set? I assume you'll mention it in the story sooner or later, but I just noticed that Cory called her mom 'Mum' and Nicky called her 'Mommy'. I probably noticed it because I'm an American-born living in Australia and all my friends are like 'Mum' and I'm like, "Yeah, my mom..." So... Yeah, sort out where they live and make sure they use the right dialects :P

- Alora

Heey, I really like this. It's just that the grammar, as I read this, is kinda weird to me. Maybe it's your own unique style, which is cool, but I'm just not used to it. I'll probably go ahead and read a few more chapters. Good job!

ahh i love this! please update soon

o i like this! k well gonna go read the rest of the chapters :)

I like it!

Aww, I got the only thank you! I was so happy that you reviewd. I'm such a sucker for stories like this... I may have told you that before... I forget...

Anyway, well written chapter. You were missing a lot of full stops/periods (depending what you call them) at the end of speech. I saw it like... well, a lot of times. And, lucky for you, I like this story enough that I managed to ignore them after I saw the first five or so. :) Uh... one grammar thing that I noticed: "He’d learned to ignore those little comments, filing them down as one of the things that made Jason, Jason." No comma between the too Jasons. I don't care what spellcheck said, it's like when you put 'had had'. You don't need a comma. :)

Apart from those thing, it was VERY good. Much better than the first time I read your first chapter. And I'm glad you updated, because I liked this story from about the fifth paragraph, and you haven't let me down yet (plot wise anyway, grammar could be better :p).

Can't wait for a review. Hope you don't take TOO long.

Love Alora

Cory is being a bit prejudice and bitchy, for hating the boy for the school he goes to. I mean, I hate people for judging me on what school I went to.

But I guess you need that for the story to really work.

I like the ending of the chapter. Although, I don't understand how she could hit the car. Does she not look when she's reversing backward. She must be very good. Not even I can do that (although, I've only been driving for like 2 years, so I might not have that much experience).

I feel sorry for Jason. And Aaron. Although, I do like Aaron. He was funny and incredibly likeable.

Anyway, upddate soon, I can't wait to see what happens and where the story goes. I'm glad that it's going to be such a long story. You're a really entertaining writer, and I've had fun.

Jen.

Yeah I'm liking this...maybe because it has a hint of Cinderella (with a twist lol) in it anyway...I like Corrine's attitude lol, she's almost feminist in terms of the Crestmount High boys and i'm falling for Jason after the first chapter...why? Duh...his eyes are green lmao...so yeah...your writing's good...a few grammatical errors that can be fixed but it's all god.

So update soon!

-MizSphinx

I loved it. I thought it was wonderful... I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Yay, a good story!

How long's it going to be? Very long? Very short? Somewhere in the middle?

Anyway, I shall read more soon.

There are some punctuation errors and spelling mistakes, but overall, not so bad. The plot is a little cliched, and the descriptions are somewhat overused...however I like your story. I'll be watching for updates!

kind of a clichéd idea but it looks like it has some potential...i'll be keeping my eye on this one.

I like it. Hehehe. So some major typos and crap grammar in most places, but LOVED the plot. I'm such a sucker for this kind of thing.

Uh... you need to add in some more action when you put your conversation. Like here '“ Your shoe! “ he yelled as she stormed away a mistake because seconds after something silver was hurled at his head. He ducked in the knick of time' As far as we know, she caould have been halfway to her car at the moment he spoke. Then she would have to turn around an come back. Or she could have been a step away. But either way she had to turn around. Not to mention the punctuation in that sentence was BAD... and all together confusing. Hehe...

Hope this helps. I have no citisisms of your writing stlye. I like it. Just, if your next chapter were a tad eaisier to read (you know, proper grammar), it would be much appreciated. :D

Awaiting an update,

Alora

"Dude, she’s danesherous "

hahha, his slurred words made me laugh. this story looks like it has a lot of promise, i love the characeters already! can't wait for the next chapter, update soon!