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Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 11/8/2007
Great poem.

Twilight Starr
Definition chapter 1 . 7/4/2007
Beautiful and very sweet.

I actually like the inconsistent grammar - it adds a special 'taste' to the composition in whole.
XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 1 . 5/23/2007
Aww I love this, Great Work!
lordelfy chapter 1 . 5/13/2007
i dont understand what is going on in this poem, but the flow and diction were wonderful!
TaltushMeiMei chapter 1 . 5/5/2007
The poem has a nice, almost sad feel to it, so that's good. My problem is with the grammar. I understand that a lot of people think that not capitalizing things is the style (though I disagree). However, I'm not about to let something like this pass up. You didn't capitalize anything except the "I"s. That proves laziness, not style. Your computer automatically capitalized those, I'd be willing to assume (and if I'm wrong, it's still annoying). There's no point in having things in all lowercase, so I'd recommend changing that (to keep people like me from going mad). The poem's good. It's not amazing, but it's got some nice parts that were nice to read. Work with the grammar, and it's a very good poem.
sleeplessblue chapter 1 . 5/4/2007
that was nice, although some grammar and typo problems. And if this is for regular friends and not love interests, I suggest changing the line "what a pity, I can't taste you" because it seems to come out more romantic. -shrug-

I like the line: "you made up the tears with laughs" :)

Well, keep it up, keep working on it. :)
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 5/4/2007
Great narration, I really loved and could relate to the honesty of this. Wonderful piece, keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.