Beautiful! Captivating!

Love it! But isn't Iris too young to spend the night with Dante or marry...

NAh...who cares! as long as it's a happy ending...

Good story...

GladnI found this!

Oh god! I was so close shedding tears myself! This is a wonderful story :D

I'm sad to see the story end, but at least they're together. I just hoped that there was more closure with their parents...

wow wonderful story! i loved it so much. can you please write more to this story?please i want to know what happens afterwards.

thank you so much!

WOW! what an amazing story, im sad to see it end but it ended so great, i can't wait to read more of ur writing :D

i really hope there is a 2nd story coming up!11plz!

Aw! That was the perfect ending! Really heart-warming :)

Thanks so much for writing this, and I hope to see more from you in the future!

~Carm~

Dante is such a perfect name for a vampire!

sunflowersing

I love this story. I just read the whole thing. The only thing is it is not really finished there is a lot left to be solved and answered yet. It definately at least needs an epilogue. So I hope you do add that "special addition".

Iris sounds pretty :)

"Still, the vision of the girl could not ejaculate itself out of his mind..."

Whoops! I think you were looking for another word...maybe erase, or eject.

Because in English, "ejaculate" refers to the action of "coming." Typically, it refers to a guy ejecting sperm from his penis, and it usually is accompanied by orgasm.

I read your introduction, and it was so wordy that I just more or less skimmed it, hoping that once you got into the actual "plot" of the story, you would pay more attention to your diction and use words correctly.

You write either like English is not your first language - in which case, you really should just have someone read through your drafts and ask you, "How can a scream be both deep and piercing?" and other such questions. Also, if you're translating from a Romance language (such as French or Portuguese), you might find to be a useful tool. I use it all the time in my Spanish and Portuguese classes.

Or, alternatively, you write like a kid who either just discovered the Thesaurus function on microsoft word, or who is trying to experiment with a lofty style. If the former, make sure you confirm the exact meaning of those cool words with a dictionary. If the latter, I guess you just need more practice.

Good luck!

good, but it seemed a bit rushed. Hmm...Still good though :) Oh, and I'm not exactly sure that they used fuck back then...Hm..That would be something to research. Anyways, I liked it :) I can't wait to see what the special addition is!

Faith

You HAVE to update this story. It is one of the very few decent ones on here. I sought it out again especially to tell you that, because it really does syick in the mind.