This is really good! Me like :) Good work!

Keep Writing!

Double AA

that was a kool poem..i liked it !

I liked this poem, the rhymes went well together. It was a nice and lyrical. I also thought it was great that you incorparated the maidens at the end. (It has a kind of chivalry feel to me)

Personally I wouldn't put 'first poem' or anything like that in my summary because it makes readers think that it's just another cliche poem. Also demanding that the reader likes your poetry is a little immature but that was what made me read it.

Surreal

Wow! This is amazing! And this is your first poem?

The rythym is great and the words create a picture in my mind, which is what you want. You did very well.

I like this. It flows very smoothly and I like your word choice. The rhythm works very well for this piece. Really upbeat and dragon-like. Nice job.