Reviews for With Intent
MayContainNuts chapter 1 . 5/5/2013
I LOVE THIS STORY! :D
Winnie T chapter 21 . 4/19/2013
This is such a cute story. It really kept my attention all the way through and your character developement really shows. You should definitely pursue a career in writing. Seriously, I loved it! :D
twaddletoe chapter 21 . 3/26/2013
this is one of the best story Ive ever read!
I havent had such a good laugh in ages
thank you!

Tt
BlaseBlanco chapter 21 . 3/4/2013
Loved this story so much.
Rosie chapter 1 . 3/3/2013
Hey there! I'm Rosie from a site called A Drop of Romeo and I'm happy to say that your story has been added to our site, under the category of Slash! Here's your review:

Rosie Thinks: The thing that makes this story really stand out is the main character, Adam. Adam has a strange power - he can see 'bad intentions', as he calls it. As in, he can see an act of extreme violence that's already happened or someone who is thinking about it. It's an absolutely horrible power to have, but I just couldn't stop reading about it. It was just so enthralling and addicting to find out what Zebbie throws at you next.

I like how there are reasons why Adam is the way he is - introverted, careful, likes to keep his head down - mainly because of this crazy power of his. Zebbie really got into his head and explored the possibilities and roads this power could take one down. His OCD-ness was a surprising part of his character, but fit in with his personality well and was consistent plus intriguing.

Adam meets Joe at the cafe where he works, but they truly come into contact when Joe finds and arrests Adam at a crime scene. Adam ends up helping Joe find his daughter as Joe struggles to understand him. Things develop between them slowly, with Adam thinking Joe is 'Mr Perfectly Straight', but this isn't the sole focus of the story. It is equally character motivated as it is plot motivated, and the reader is at the edge of the seat wanting to solve the mystery.

There is a lot of long chunks of description that can look a bit intimidating. However, I didn't find any of it long-winded, boring or hard to get through. It wasn't an info dump either, even though the start is mainly description. It actually showcases Adam's personality in a way that is interesting and realistic. Zebbie has created a totally original and intriguing plot that is sure to draw you in. She writes beautifully and both the dialogue and the narration flows well. 'With Intent' has a great concept and an amazing story-line, I highly recommend!
TO-OLazyToLogin chapter 21 . 1/27/2013
Wow. This was a fantastic story. I don't really know what to say. It wasc if I could feel his emotions myself, his hysteria, his hurt... A great story.
Mandy chapter 21 . 1/23/2013
Cannot believe you left it there! And this story was finished ages ago so now it will never be
Fixed! :'( such a bloody awesome story though, you made me cry for poor Adam many times :') I loved it so much, the 'crazy' bits were amazingly were written. I'm pretty sure my heart broke a couple of times too. Thanks! X
Guest chapter 21 . 1/11/2013
Awesomeness itself! I didn't think I'd be interested in a story like this. But, wow! You are so talented. I love tgese characters & their chemistry. I'd love to read more of their story.
Astir-Lewis chapter 21 . 1/8/2013
I love you. Lol no seriously this story was AMAZEBALLS. I wish it were longer. If only you had put an actual sex scene instead of confusion and vomit lol. Otherwise it is definitely and epic story.
miikkuli chapter 21 . 12/29/2012
I love this story. I think it's the best story I've read in Fictionpress. It's charming and funny and quite elegant, too.
nffhkasjfnbsdkjb chapter 21 . 12/16/2012
This was a great read. I love Adam's character, and I think you had his OCD spot on. I felt the story was just getting started when it ended though and I would love to read more about these two! XD

Thanks for writing this

Suki
Kiely chapter 21 . 12/10/2012
I love this story.
Delauney chapter 21 . 12/5/2012
Your writing is very good, your story was a great read. My only peeve was that I didnt have a visual of what adam looked like beyond being skinny, average height, no facial hair and a narrow nose...
Prim the amazing chapter 21 . 10/7/2012
This. Story. Is. Amazing! Wow, the characters are so believable and cool and I love the plot and most of all Adam! I also like... EVERYTHING!
Guest chapter 21 . 10/2/2012
Fun story I enjoyed it !
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