Reviews for Free Fall
otter pop chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
Aw. I feel bad for her.

I like this a lot, I might soon come to love it. ]
Da Vinci at Work chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
WOw. I'm going to love this.
Mimi chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
I like where this sotry is going. PLease let it be a happy ending. Oh i also love your other sttories to. Keep up the good work.

Chocolate Trifle chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
Looks really good! Can't wait for updates!

- Animeniac
Lindy chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
Wow, it is rather intriguing isn't it. Aw, cute little baby. No no, it takes a rather serious, dramatic tone and it does promise an interesting story. The settings are fantastic. o-o ; Unless Rynne is sad on the inside and sticking her head high because she was trying to, erh, look at a bird on the ceiling or something. Damn, that has nothing to do with that either. x.x

Ohwell. It all translates to: Update soon! x3
DeuxiemeFois chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
I like the plot and I like where this is going, this should be an interesting story!
biggerthanthis chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
Hey! This sounds like a really cool story! I feel so sorry for Hartley (the daughter, anyway) about her mom...

Write on!

Just as part of my review, the chapter kind of ends strangely. It's kind of awkward, how Hayden goes, "Okay, so..." Especially with "he began". I think maybe you should go "here's the plan" after that? I know it's a little hackneyed, but when you cut off with "a confident smirk" it's abrupt.

Oh, I just felt like addressing that issue, it was kind of bothering me! Don't hate me...:3 Heh heh heh...
Venus Smurf1 chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
Yay! Another story from your brilliant mind! I'm so incredibly excited.

This is going to be spectacular. I mean, everything from you is, but I can tell that this is going to be an amazing story. Thank you for giving it to us!

Can't wait for more!
E.B. Rowling chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
Wow! I'm in love with this story!

I can't really honestly think of any critiques. It seemed pretty nice, the grammer was good.

Do you understand how hard it is to please my nit-picky mind with word-choice? But you suceeded! Congratulations, you've formed an intriguing and dramatic story.

I can't honestly call this classy, but what would the world be without novels like this?

Keep up the nice work. I'm excited for the updates.

rocky19 chapter 1 . 5/12/2007
good start, hope you update soon
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