Reviews for Free Fall
Rachel chapter 1 . 9/11/2009
ah please update!
reader567 chapter 11 . 8/29/2009
I don't know what it is...but something irks me when I read this story.

I think you have a great foundation to start off with, but your characters lack depth. I wish you could have explored Rynne's relationship with her mother seems like your skimming the surface.

You spend a lot of time exploring the theme of hate; how the school population is affected by Fiona's actions, and they hate her for ruining their family...but you didn't effectively address Rynne's thoughts and feelings on this. Wouldn't she arbor some hate for her mother also? Wouldn't Rynne feel embarrassed about her mother's profession? How does she resolve or cope with these feelings?

I'm trying to connect to your characters, especially Rynne, but I think Rynne is just too innocent, naive and perfect. I would really like to see a darker take on her character or at least more emotions from her.

But then again, I'm only on chapter 9. I'm hoping the story will grow on me.
CarBeck4ever chapter 15 . 8/29/2009


Oh How I want to jump Hayden...and Dion for that matter. But he doesnt talk much. Please keep them coming.
hannah.pritchard chapter 2 . 8/18/2009
So many people in on the plan, I feel for Rynne, she seems desperate for a friend.

The story's flowing nicely but some bits seem forced especially the use of language - makes it seem a bit contrived.

Again some typos I noticed that you might want to edit:

"Paige was flirt..."

"I stay after every day..."
hannah.pritchard chapter 1 . 8/18/2009
Interesting start, not much happened but we got the plot.

Some typos you might want to change:

"...take advantage them" - should be "take advantage of them".

"Even whenshe walked" - You need a space between when and she.

"..came to disliked him"
DawnAwakens chapter 15 . 8/17/2009
This story is so amazing! The plot is well thought and everything is worded to perfection! I love how he's seeking revenge after SOMETHING, that will hopefully be explained in your future chapters.. but I really don't want him to execute whatever he's planning. Rynne & Hayden truly are a wonderful couple; they are so cute! I also really love how created Hayden to be the stereotypical rich, hott boy.. yet you don't talk about how much of a playboy he is. That's definitely a plus side to his personality. I realy am intrigued by this story and I'd hate it if you would waste the story by NOT updating! I know it's been only a year or whatnot but come on man, you've got readers dying to hear what happens next! lol. PLEASE UPDATE SOON, I REALLY like this story, realy like it ) Keep up with the nice work. I hope to be seeing an alert in my inbox lol.
Kairi-21 chapter 15 . 7/31/2009
hey this is an awsome story. I cant wait to read what happens next. please continue onward with this. does he betray her? omg, i want more.
benozir chapter 15 . 7/25/2009
omg! that was an intense chapter! i really liked the story its awesome! pleas uupload more often!
lissalee chapter 15 . 7/25/2009
this is really good so far.

cant wait for the next chapter!
xtheonlyonex chapter 15 . 7/24/2009
Please, please, please finish this story! I can't wait to know what happens in the end! I noticed you haven't updated in a while, and I really want to know what happens to Rynne and Hayden, so please, please finish. Thanks!
xtheonlyonex chapter 2 . 7/24/2009
I like it a lot! I like how you added in that part about Fiona, and why she slept with so many guys. It helps to understand her. It's really good. Can't wait to read more!
rinky chapter 15 . 7/3/2009
hey ur story z awesome..y stop updating huh?common dont abandon us readers plz...
foreverxlove chapter 15 . 5/21/2009
I love this story(: Update soon!(please) haha:]
silver sky memories chapter 15 . 5/10/2009
great, great, great story!

i can hardly wait for more.

im very curious about Haydens past.
Midnightxoxo chapter 14 . 5/7/2009
great chapter, great story! i love yoiur writting and the plot line isoriginal in its own way! i cant wait for hte next update [if there is one].

:D Emma
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