Reviews for It Was a Believable Lie
rust phoenix chapter 1 . 7/23/2007
This is such a beautiful piece, very creative. I love the wording you use, it has a nice rhythm to it. Cool poem.
Nigousan-Aoiro chapter 1 . 6/26/2007
This is a great piece...I feel as if it has a hidden depth to it that I can't see right now...And I really like the subtle rhyme scheme. It is a relieve to see writers that will not try to make everything rhyme..

I see a lot of emphasis and the separation of thoughts. It is a big help to the reader to see where your mind is...

Overall Great Work

But since I am such a critic...I can't help but say it seems a bit unfinished...but it works that way to me.
shookierewrites chapter 1 . 6/7/2007
wow, thats sad and beautiful all at the same time. good job.

xxtobeyoursxx chapter 1 . 6/7/2007
cute, loved the wording
Ladywilde chapter 1 . 5/13/2007
He puts his hands on my face like a wedding veil

That line is fantastic.
cucumbersalad chapter 1 . 5/13/2007
i didn't quite understand it, but... i liked it! a lot.

i still don't know what the lie is, either. is it the last phrase he says?